On Thu, 15 Aug 2002 15:31:45 -0500
"Brian Greinke" <briang@rice.edu> wrote:
Author's Notes: Well, part one is down, out of a projected four or so parts.
C&C of any kind is more than welcome (yes, that even includes out-and-out
flames...though if you do go in for the more incendiary type of message,
don't expect a reply). Also, if anyone would be interested in pre-reading
either for this story or an original work that I'm also in the middle of, please
let me know.
I liked it quite a lot - at first, I was a bit worried that this might
be a BGC2040 fic, but I was relieved when I saw it wasn't :).
All in all, I think it was good, but I did notice a few things in the
characterization department. Sylia appears to be a little too
businesslike, and she's not like that all the time. Also, unless this is
way ahead of the chronology shown in the series and Linna has given up
her dream, her future plans would probably still include trying for a
career as a dancer.
Here's where I say everything that I should have said in the beginning, too;
namely, if you don't like ACCs of any sort, it's likely that you won't enjoy this
story, as I'm sure you've noticed if you got this far. In a way, this is just as
much a story about the BGC 'universe' as it is about the Knight Sabers
themselves, and as such a certain amount of ACC insertion, some in central
roles, is unavoidable. I am attempting to maintain a certain power/technology
hierarchy, however, with the Sabers either at or near the top in the
appropriate areas, and I'd appreciate it if people could let me know if I'm
succeeding there.
What's an ACC :) ? I know ANC stands for "Annoying New Character", but I
haven't read this other acronym before. As for Maedwin, I didn't find
him annoying. You're doing a nice job of setting him up as an antagonist.