--- "Miller, Bert" <Bert.Miller@unisys.com> wrote:

You actually know how many chapters this'll run?
I'm impressed.  The temptation to keep adding
chapters towards the end should be quite strong.

I have a fairly clear outline, having learned from the hell of "Serena and
Luna", and I'm aiming for writing discipline.

     At 7:12, the clock radio erupts into the middle of Mina 
Rush's cover of "Jailhouse Rock", specifically the synthesizer

So Minako is already a rock star here?  Precocious of her.

Heh. No. This is actually a reference to one of Karl Edward Wagner's stories --
don't feel bad that you didn't get it.

  

Hmm.. so US rule gives Japan our drawbacks, too?  No, it
seems worse than that.  I'm not sure there is a city in
the U.S. where teenagers wouldn't be safe taking public
transportation to and from school during the day.  But it is
clear that Sam's father thinks there is not insignificant
risk involved here.

Well, look at what happens *both* times Sam takes the train in this story --
there are crimes being committed. Not violent crimes, but do you really think
that either perp would hesitate to pull a knife?

There are several hypotheses possible here, and no way to
choose between them (hopefully later chapters will allow us
to select).  Was Father trying to stop an assassination?  This
seems to be the meaning you'd like us to assume.  Or is Father's
agency the secret master of the world, one against which the
President had been trying to rebel in the cause of freedom?

Or was the "departed" President a miserable, tricky blackguard?

OTOH, combined with the "tension", and one of the things you
have a bit of a rep for in your stories, I can derive another
meaning from this.

Okay. Let's put a stop to this one.

Sam is straight, and so is Mary. There *will* be yuri, but not between either
of them.

Might the smoking have been inspired by the dub's Brooklyn
accent?  Listening to the dub, I'm always surprised that
Molly doesn't have a cigarette in her hand.

No comment.

not to mention the occasional passing reference to the
admirable policies of the Reich -- their policies in
educational matters, of course.

Unlike one of the other commentators, I interpret the "Reich"
as being American (the Heinlein quote at the beginning almost
mandates this).

Nope. Since she *is* an American, that wouldn't make sense.

I find I'm quite caught up in this.  I REALLY, REALLY, want
to read the rest.

Thanks!

Chris Davies.

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