----- Original Message -----
From: "Thermopyle" <Thermopyle@tds.net>
To: "Sam Vilsmeier" <syp104@psu.edu>; "FFML (E-mail)" <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Thursday, May 02, 2002 12:26 AM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfict][R.5/SM][1st Draft]Awkward Consequences: Chapter
1

Ranma turned his head to see who it was. Ranma's body totally froze up,

and

his eyes almost bulged out of his head when he saw the face of a person he

had

only met once. Shit, meet the Fan.

okay, this does NOT make sense.  how the hell is hotaru a fan?  she doesn't
know a thing about him, or at least didn't until she read through that
magazine, everything she knew about him, while they were together the month
and a half before or whatever, was from personal interraction.

if this was something like Uncles!  that would make sense, but i don't get
this angle at all.  plus, he seems unhappy to see her, simply because of

this

'fan' thing.  the reaction should be more along the lines of, 'oh yeah, i
remember what she looked like naked.  not bad!' or 'shit.  i'm gonna die.

i'm

gonna die.  i'm gonna die.' or something more related to the whole sex issue
and the surprise of her visit.

Ack!  I completely missed the joke!  Too much Uncles! on the brain, I guess,
where Hotaru IS Ranma's biggest fan.  >_<

Hmm.  I think it should be changed to 'the fan.', no capitalization, but I'm
not sure, since it's being introduced, kind of.  Makes things a little odd.
if fan is capitalized, then it should be 'The Fan,' I believe, not just 'the
Fan.'


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