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From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
To: "noirchloe" <noirchloe@nyc.rr.com>
Cc: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Saturday, March 16, 2002 2:03 PM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Ranma 1/2][Angst] Ukyou's Betrayal

And continuing yet again:

Yay, I'm part of the continuation!

I think she pictures him in more romantic terms than that. Maybe 'fiance'
instead.

You're probably right.

   He must be dying to see me, because I know I can't wait

to see him.

Ranma: I am?

Ukyou:  If you know what's good for you!

 This should be the happiest day I've had in weeks, since his

unexpected departure.  The mere thought of seeing him again is bringing

life

back into my life,

bit redundent. I'd rephrase that somehow.

KP:  Hmm.   It had been weeks since his unexpected departure.  The thought
of seeing him again was bringing life back to my life,  ( a little cleaner I
suspect.)

Konatsu: Oh, Ukyou-sama. I never dreamed you thought of me that way. I'll
get a robe right away.

Ukyou: ...

The scary thing is... I can envision Konatsu's reaction like that. =p

The first morning that dream was realized

would be the first perfect morning of my life.

And then it'll all go downhill from there.

Was I that obvious...

A wistful sigh reminds me that I must get going,

It was Konatsu's.

"Ah! What are you doing in my room and why didn't I see you before?" Ukyou
shouted.

Konatsu said, "I'm a ninja. Sneaking around is what I do."

I wonder if maybe DB really likes the silent ninja, and why^?^

Konatsu: Time to make the donuts.

I gave up on that phrase... no one ever seemed to get it>_<

Haven't seen that volume, but methinks it's all being viewed through
rose-tinted glasses. :)

I wear mine on occasion.  Problem is... life's a bitch when you remove
them^^

Cowboy hat or chaps?

It was 'western style' after all. :)

Heh

Understanding his need to be his own man, I have tried to give him some
space, never really chastising his actions.

Especially the 'You haven't married me yet' one.

When asked, isn't every woman completely understanding?  Even when their
ranting about their man.

Sure I've slipped up on

occasion, who wouldn't?  When they desired to be with someone, and only

that

somebody, so strongly.

Think the question mark should be at the end and the earlier one should be

a

comma.

*sigh* I remember this phrase giving me trouble.  I'll take your suggestion
and run, swiftly.

As long as they are in agreement with mine.

Actually, most women view the world that way. My husband/boyfriend is not

on

a leash. He can do whatever he wants, as long as I approve of it. :)

I think those of us that learn this little quirk, have lasting success with
women. The rest...

  It's still hard to swallow at times, his current situation and

living arrangements, but I trust Ranchan to make the right decision when

he

needs to, when the time is right.

Ranma: You mean I can marry Azusa and you won't try to stop me?

Ukyou: AHHHH!

That little quirk comes into play here^^

You dwell on the bathing a bit. I think you're stretching it out too long.

You're probably right, as it's been mentioned before.

"Good morning, Konatsu!"  I call merrily to the boy, who was busily
preparing to open the restaurant.  I start straight for the door,
indifferent to how impolite it would be to him.

It would?

Well, maybe most other people it would be.

I stop in mid-stride, face glowing like a supernova at the thought of

Ranma

sending me a letter.

Eh? Why?

Ukyou:  A letter from the Dojo must be from Ranma, honey.

"Lady Ukyou."  The whispered words break me.  As I realize my last and

only

friend is still here for me.

Konatsu: I'm afraid I have to leave you. I need to find a hime to serve,

and

frankly, you've got issues I'd rather not deal with. I'll leave you a
forwarding address for my last paycheck.

Ukyou:  But... I never really paid you to begin with...

I can feel the rocking motion as Konatsu tries to sooth me as I bawl my
heart out, wondering when, if ever, the pain will end, wondering when I

will

at least have control over her body, over my emotions, over my tears.

I know it won't be enough, never enough, but that doesn't matter.  I

needed

anything, anything that can, or even might provide me assistant in

getting

through this moment.  This moment that I'm again cast aside like

garbage.

This moment when my feelings, thoughts, and dreams had again been

ignored

and deemed unworthy of consideration by my best friend.

A simple letter, a simple statement, and I have been betrayed.

I think I'll blow something up. Maybe the chapel where the marriage is to
take place.

Ukyou: Yes... What a fine Idea.
Konatsu:  Have fun storming the Dojo!

D.B. Sommer

Author's notes: I had this idea or thought for some time now.  Of all

the

things in the anime and manga, one of the most cruel has to be Nabiki
sending the invitations to Ukyou and Shampoo.

Nah. She did it because she wanted to amuse herself. Besides, Takahashi
wanted to end the series with a bang. :)

KP:  Like most of the things in Ranma:)

  Lack of empathy and

understanding by people led to a great amount of disharmony,  to say the
least.

Well, that actually applies to most conflicts in life in general.

 Interesting piece, but it drags a tad in the center and leans to being

too

melodramatic. I'd cut a little to help with the flow. Outside of that, not
really much to say.

Thanks for the comments and yes I can be melodramatic.^^

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