Woo-Hoo! More C&C ^_^
Jumping ahead to get to this one:
Appreciated.
An Important Decision
A Ranma 1/2 fanfic
by Ginrai
Warning: No pre-readers were used at all (and it might show).
Just gives us more to work with. :)
That is, if the fic is readable ^_^
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Leaning against a side of the Tendou Dojo, Ranma stared at the
note in his hands. 'Well, here I am.... I wonder where Akane is.'
What an odd note. :)
Ranma: Wow! Akane already knew she wouldn't be here on time!
Looking around to see who else was here, he asked, "So all of you
got a notice from Akane?" As they all nodded, he took note of the
others. 'Pops, Mr. Tendou, Ryouga... Kunou.... Hmm... Shinnosuke?'
Stunned by who the last person was, Ranma approached the broom-carrying
boy. "Hey, Shinnosuke! Wondering wat'cha doing here?"
Shinnosuke: I was wondering the same thing. Who are you again, by the way?
Heh
It occurs to me the movie 'Memento' was probably based on the life of Shin
boy. :)
Don't think I've seen the movie... am guessing it's about someone that
can't remember anything ^_^
Ranma, though, was too stunned by what he had first heard to
answer back. "Important... decision?" was all he was able to get out
before moving away from the other boy so as to get his thoughts
together. 'Akane didn't tell me anything about a decision. Did
she.... _Could_ she have changed her mind about Shinnosuke after all
this time?' Trying to regain some of his swagger, Ranma murmered,
"Feh, not like I actually care about that uncute...." But he was
unable to finish, doubt and concern filling his thoughts.
Nice touch.
Thanks.
"So the foul sorcerer no doubt knows of the reason for this
special occasion -- to see the noble Tatewaki Kunou take part in his
greatest victory ever. I had no idea thou is such a gracious loser,
Saotome."
Heh. Of course Kunou would assume the best for himself.
Kunou: 'Tis the true way of a samurai.
"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?" Ranma screamed back at the
Furinkan High kendo team captain, glad to have his mind occupied by
something else for the moment. If there was one thing the martial
artist was sure about with concern to the current situation, it's that
Kunou was invited _not_ because he was Akane's choice.
That read awkwardly. You might want to reword those last couple of
sentences.
Got a few suggestions for it and so will change.
'More than
likely so that he doesn't cause any problems later on.'
Before anything else could be said to the kendoist, the door to
the dojo slid open as a figure stepped through, casting a shadow over
all of the occupants. Sporting a short-cut black hair and wearing a
dress normal to girls going to Furinkan High, utmost attention was paid
upon the person. There was, though, something different....
And here is where we realize something is horribly wrong, since you're so
vague in the description.
Subtle it was not ^_^
Reaching what he deemed to be the correct reason for this, tears fell
from his eyes as he said joyously, "Isn't it wonderful? My daughter's
already pregnant with Ranma's first child!"
Heh.
He was bound to go for what is probably the best conclusion here ^_^
And with that, he pulled
out a pair of paper fans and started celebrating with his friend.
While the others were in the middle of an uproar over what
happened, Shinnosuke looked carefully at the figure standing in the
front. Certain of what he was seeing, he said, "That's not Akane.
It's a giant chicken!"
Oh?
Ranma: He's hallucinating. That's the third time today he mistook one
of us for a giant chicken.
Soun added harshly, "Boy, I can well assure you that I know the
difference between my own daughter and a chicken. And that," he
pointed to Akane, who at that moment was pecking the wooden floor in
front of her, "is most certainly Akane!"
Shinnosuke, though, was adamant with his view. "But I tell you,
it's a giant chicken! _A_ _giant_ _chicken_!"
And at this point we know Shinnosuke must be right since he's insistant
and
the others aren't. :)
That and the fact 'Akane' is pecking the floor ^_^
"LIES!" Kunou screamed out in furor, thrusting his bokken forward
so that the tip was touching Shinnosuke's nose. "If you know what's
good for you, thou shall not speak any more garbage about the pure
Akane Tendou with thy tongue." Chuckling to himself, he added, "Next
thing I know, you shall try to convince me that Saotome and the
pigtailed girl are one and the same,
Shinnosuke; Don't be absurd. I would never claim that. Who are they,
anyway?
Hehehehe
or that my peers think that I'm a
delusional buffoon.
Heh
One of the first lines I thought of when I first came up with the idea.
Ranma cut him off, saying, "We'll talk about this later," before
tossing the boy outside and shutting the entrance. 'Poor boy.
I think he would say 'guy' rather than 'boy'
Yup. Will change.
I guess
he doesn't have a chance to be chosen by Akane.' Having taken care of
that situation, he walked towards his fiancee, who was looking around
the dojo. "So, Akane, what was this important decision you wanted to
talk to us about?"
Flapping her arms as if they were wings,
or wings as if they were arms. :)
Either way works ^_^
Akane replied, "Bak-ba-
kaw! Bak-bak."
Heh
Soun: She just has a sore throat; that is all.
As everyone inched closer to her, Soun asked, "So, daughter,
you've made your choice on who to marry?
Heh
^_^
There was dead silence as everyone had a look as if they just saw
a ghost.
"You--" Genma started.
"--chose--" Ryouga continued.
"--Konatsu!" Ranma finished, not believing what he had heard.
Konatsu: Why not? I'm about the only one here that isn't self-centered or
take advantage of opportunities presented to him.
Ranma: That's because you've had almost as little time as Akari.
Konatsu: (Head bowed) True.
"Bak-bak-bak?" Akane asked, confused.
"Of course none of us knew!" Ranma shouted, his emotions
currently running wild. "I mean, when did this happen?"
Staring at the floor, she replied quietly, "Bak-bak-ba-kaw. Bak-
bak-bak-bak."
"In the back of an alley near Ucchan's during the middle of the
night?" Soun asked before breaking down in tears.
Hehe. You're evil, Gin.
How else do you think she got pregnant? ^_^
"Mount Jusendo?" Ranma whispered. "I... well, what I mean to say
is...." The pigtailed boy silently cursed himself at his inability to
tell the truth even at this point. Taking a deep breath, he blurted
out, "Yes! I did say 'I love you!' on Mount Jusendo!"
Ranma; But I was referring to Azusa at the time.
Thankfully no one was able to hear what he said.
Softly, he
added, "But I guess it's too late now."
Due to Soun's piercing wail, no one else heard what Ranma said.
Ranma; I said at least on the bright side I can sleep with whomever I want
now.
Hehehe
"Ryouga!" Ranma cut in. "Why are you so worried about who Akane
chose? Don't you have Akari?"
Ryouga; No. She changed her hairstyle, lied about her background, and got
her own series on Battle Atheles.
Ranma: So she became a lesbian?
Ryouga: I believe that's already implied by the fact she's on Battle
Athletes.
"RANMA! I...." Sheepishly, the Lost Boy realized he couldn't
think of a good enough reason to tell him.
"Let me guess," Ranma said bluntly, "You couldn't decide between
Akane or Akari and so wanted to find a way to have both."
"'Tis the way of a true samurai," Kunou interjected.
I agree with Kunou. Two women is better than one.
True ^_^
Gently guiding his beloved away from the Lost Boy, Kunou asked,
stroking her feathery hand, "Why have you broken my heart as such,
Akane Tendou? What does this boy have that I, Tatewaki Kunou, do not?"
"Bak-bak-bak-bak-bak-bak," Akane replied, pecking the top of his
head with each cluck.
Tears streamed down the kendoist's face. "'Tis such a sweet poem
from such a sweet girl.
Heh
Actually, what Chicken Boo was trying to say is that he has no brains
-- but he completely misinterpreted it ^_^
"T-tw-two Akanes?" Ryouga said, aghast at what he saw.
Should have seen this coming too.
Well, she couldn't be so late that she'd actually miss the whole
situation.
"What giant chicken?" Kunou questioned, looking back at the Akane
who had recited to him that lovely poem not too long ago. Deep in his
mind he knew Saotome had something to do with the two versions of his
beloved.
Of course.
Kunou: (Grabbing Akane-Boo) Before anything says anything, I want to
say that my heart belongs only to this girl.
"Hmm...." Knowing that something suddenly seemed off with what
had happened, Ranma walked to the Akane near Kunou,
I'd drop the 'near Kunou' part. Not really needed.
Will see. Otherwise it might sound like he walked to the real Akane
and tried to yank off her hair ^_^;
grabbed her hair
and yanked it off.
"Zounds!" Kunou shouted in astonishment. "Now there's one Akane
and a giant chicken in a dress!"
Ranma placed the wig back on Chicken Boo's head.
"Now there are two Akane's!"
Heh
At least he sort of realizes what's going on ^_^
Ranma pulled it off.
"One Akane and a giant chicken in a dress!"
Ranma placed it back on.
"Two Akane's!"
Very amusing. Had me snickering out loud.
Thanks. Kunou's lines were fun to write.
Appearing by the door, Shinnosuke said, "See! I told you that
was a giant chicken!" Looking next to him to see Genma trying to sneak
out, he asked, "Who are you?"
One splash of water later:
[Why I'm just a cute panda!] the sign read before Genma-panda,
holding a tire in his other hand, turned it around. [Look what I can
do with this tire!]
Why is Genny trying to duck out of there anyway?
He doesn't expect things to go well when Akane finds out that they all
mistook a giant chicken for her.
Will try to make this part less confusing.
While they were getting reacquainted with each other, Chicken Boo
I rememebered who this was after you explained it to me. Makes it even
more
amusing.
The idea of placing Chicken Boo in the Ranma world was too ammusing to
pass up (just should have written it faster ^_^;).
It was either this idea or one where Nodoka tells everyone she's found
the manliest man out there (and Genma tries to tell everyone it's a
giant chicken... Nodoka doesn't react so kindly to it).
Akane smiled brightly at that. "Well, everyone knows how Ranma
keeps going out to be around Shampoo and Ukyou, right? Not that I care
or anything, but I wondered to myself just what did they have that I
didn't."
It all depends on which fans you ask. :)
Though a number of the answers are ones that should never be shown on a
list, least they starte a flame war ^_^
Ryouga cut Ranma off before he could have said anything.
"After some deep thinking, I realized what it was. And so...."
Everyone closed in to hear what it was. "I'm going to open my own
restaurant!"
But that is something they would all agree on. :)
Yup ^_^
After I got this scene, I knew I was ready to write the fic. Shows
that her (and Shinnosuke's) logic wasn't any better than the others.
Shinnosuke finally broke the silence by saying, "I think that's a
wonderful idea! Everyone knows how good a cook you are!"
My, he remembers that about her too. I am impressed.
As long as it centers around Akane, he'll have a good chance at
remembering it.
A few seconds later Chicken Boo crashed through the ceiling.
After the dust cleared, he looked around to see just where he was.
Hearing the faint sound of steel being drawn, he gazed up to see
a feminine-looking ninja wearing a sinister smile that was very much
out of place with concern to his/her other features.
"Ba-kaw?" he asked, trembling in fear....
Probably a good time to grab a spatula and impersonate Ukyou. :)
Hehehehe
(Ukyou, wondering what was taking Konatsu so long, walks into her
storage room and sees Konatsu hugging a giant chicken that's wearing
chef clothes and holding onto a huge spatula. The chicken seems to be
trying to get out of his grasp.)
Ukyou: (In a state of semi-shock) Konatsu, why are you hugging that
giant chicken?
Konatsu: (Letting go of Chicken Boo) What gian... Ukyou-sama! But....
(Turning to see who the other Ukyou was, he sees Chicken Boo running
away as fast as he can.)
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A long time ago, after reading a fanfic called 'Tenchi Booyo!' by Mike
Fenton (http://www.tmffa.com/x/tenchi_booyo.txt), I had an idea for a
Ranma fic involving Chicken Boo.
Then I decided to hold off on the idea for some time, thinking that no
one else would write such a fic....
So here I am with the _second_ Ranma/Chicken Boo xover ^_^;
So someone did do a Ranma one? What was it's name?
Called 'Mistaken Identity' -- was sent around a week before this was.
Here's hoping it gave a few laughs.
Yep. Very effective and amusing humor piece. One of the better ones I've
seen in a while.
Cool! Nice to hear you liked it that much ^_^
Thanks a lot for the C&C!
Ginrai
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