I don't know if I responded to the first chapter when you first put it out,
but I liked it then as well as now. Chapter two seems to be going in
a good direction, as 'Kasumi' is learning how to expand her bounds
and is begining to pick up clues as to just when in the series she is
(before Miss Hinako was introduced, at any rate).

>From the looks of things, 'Kasumi's' next project is likely to be teaching
Nabiki that actions have consequences, and that one cannot be the
instigator of chaos and disharmoney without it coming back to catch you
up somehow, no mater how long it takes to do so.

I know I've seen Nabiki's slow decent from being a somewhat mischievious
highschool girl to the Ice Queen from Hell (I read ahead in the New
Ranmascan Project). If she isn't stopped soon in your story, she will become
very callous and harder to manage later on...

Anyway, I suppose that I'd better get back to my own impending disaster
of a fill in story. With any luck, Boiled Nyanniichuan will shape up into
a decent story somehow...

^_^;;

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