Subject: [FFML] Re: [FanFic][SI] Heart of Sugar. . . Ch.1
From: Boredcollective@aol.com
Date: 10/11/2001, 11:00 PM
To: sommer@3rdm.net
CC: ffml@anifics.com

In a message dated 10/10/2001 9:26:15 AM US Mountain Standard Time, 
sommer@3rdm.net writes:

Doing this in between my work on a private project

Thanks for your efforts! They are greatly appreciated.

 > Hmm... I was looking over some Self-Insertion stuff, like Carrotglance's
 > classic
 > 'Insertion' and I recalled how much I enjoyed all those many, many SIs
 from
 > years
 > and years ago.
 
 Hmm. Most people remember them and rech. :)

Yes, well, a long, long time ago in a galaxy far, far away, they were
my favorite type of fanfic. ^_^;;;

Some were actually quite nice. They do tend to make good
introductory material for any random anime. (Especially since a
lot of them tend to repeat verbatim what happened in the
original. ^_-) I've had more than my fill by now, unless someone
comes up with something truly unique.

In other words, an SI a bad fanfic does not necessarily make.

Gotta be ****REEEEEEEAAAAALLL**** careful when writing
it, though. Can get really trite, really quickly.

 >     "Heh. Cool, if ya got me into Ryouga we could seriously mess
 > with some heads with this link--'We will kill you Ranma! Because of
 > you we've seen HELL!' Hah!"
 
 Why do I think this will backfire horribly.

Because you know how I like to write. ^_^

 >     Sailor Chibimoon screamed. "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!"
 >
 >     Jason screamed. "AAAAAAAAAAAAAH!"
 >
 >     Ben screamed. "AAAAAAAAAAH!"
 >
 >     "AAAAAAAH!"
 
 I sympathsize.>_<

Gruesome, innit?

 >     "Whoah,"
 
 Think it's just 'Whoa" but I could be wrong.

Agreed. I suppose it could be practically any way you wish
to emphasize the word, but whoa is the traditional manner.

 > cussing worse than a teamster, and, and, and was so freaked out that
 > she couldn't help but think in a huge, long, run-on sentence, and---
 >
 >     "Uh oh," said Ben in the closed-off, forbidden spaces of
 > Chibiusa's brain.
 
 Which were large and many.

Indeed. Trying to get inside Chibiusa's mind is a very strange
philosophical process. I'll have to review a bit more to get her
character right.

 >     "Ummmm," Chibiusa voiced aloud, looking up and trying to
 > figure out who was speaking, "who
 
 Who

Resolved in another thread. ^_^

 >     "RIGHT, BEN?"
 >
 >     "Uhmmm, let me get back to you on that."
 >
 >     "@#$%%$^%$!!! ...Don't tell me: We're stuck, aren't we?"
 
 Wouldn't be fun if you weren't.

The Law of Fun Story Writing. The plot needs justify the means.

 >     "I'm going to kill you. Slowly, excruciatingly, and in ways
 > that would make Vlad Tepes vomit.
 
 Heh. Now that was original. :)

Jason said that's what he'd say. ^_^

 >     "So-ACK-much the better OOMPH-"
 
 I like Jason. A lot. This is exactly what I would do in a similar 
situation.

I'm glad you enjoy his characterization. He'll be glad to hear it.

 >     "I don't drink."
 >
 >     "I'll drink, you can drive us home afterwards."
 
 I don't think it works that way,.

No, but hey, can't hurt to try. ^_^

 >     Luna-P's eyes flickered out, leaving a heavily-digitized
 > image of Sailor Pluto. "Small Lady," the Senshi of Time reprimanded
 > softly, "you are supposed to be distracting that daimon right now."
 
 Now this is the time to freak Pluto out and give her the finger. ,

Awww, she's not _that_ bad. ^_^

 >     "Wait a second, Jason! Do you know how to fight?" asked
 > Ben as the three-in-one combo rushed at the Daimon's back.
 >
 >     "Uhhh, in theory. Besides, Usagi can do it! How hard can it
 > be?"
 
 In truth, this is a very good point.

If she can do it, any ol' SI could. ^_^

 >     Soiya peeled Sailor Chibimoon off its neck and held her
 > in front of its eyes. "Well, what's this?"
 >
 >     Sailors Moon and Mars stared incredulously. "Chibiusa!"
 
 Bite its nose. Bite its nose.

Probably for a future story...

 >     *Ping-ping-ping-ping-ping!* The stream of pink hearts blasted
 > against Soiya's face. The force of the assault surprised it,
 > knocking it over.
 
 Heh. Finally got it right.

^_^ Chibimoon's PSHA always was kind of pointless, wasn't it?

 >     "You're awfully stubborn," Soiya said.
 >
 >     Ben flailed around, swinging Chibimoon's arms wildly.
 >
 >     *Phoonk!* Somehow, he managed to jamm
 
 jam

Right, got it.

 >
 >     *Ping-ping-ping-ping-pingping-ping!* The Wand fired up inside
 > the daimon's mouth. The weird warped beast fell down, twitching,
 > the equivalent of a magical machinegun slapping through its soft
 > palate and up against its version of a brain.
 
 Which was the size of a pea.

Quite. ^_^

 >     "Chibiusa-chan!" Sailor Moon drew closer with a demandingly
 > inquisitive look on her face. "What are you doing here?!"
 
 Have some real fun and feel Usagi up. She might never recover from that 
one.
 :)

Hmmm... I'd have to check to see if either I or Jason would ever do such
a thing...

No, actually, we're pretty repressed. Unless we're pushed. ^_^

 Cute and amusing. Not sure if it could work over the long haul, though.

Yes, that is a genuine concern. I'm not entirely sure if I could
maintain the plot for long.

I mean, it's a good shockfic, but unless carefully planned and
executed (by firing squad), it would just fall apart.

 D.B. Sommer

Jason and I have a few ideas, though...

Thanks again for the commentary! I'll try to get some more
done soon. (Though school's been kind of draining lately.
It's hard to write when one feels like a vacuum cleaner's
just been put to one's brain...)

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    "We are the Bored. Lower your shields and surrender your fics.
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     Your humor will adapt to entertain us.
     Resistance is and always has been: Futile."
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