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From: "Ryuu Jin" <neoryuu@hotmail.com>
To: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Saturday, July 21, 2001 11:03 PM
Subject: [FFML] [FFML][R 1/2][X-over] Son of the Demon
Son of the Demon:
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A lot tough to read at this point. A couple of quick formating aspects;
always have a new paragraph for a new speaker, it makes it much easier to
read (using four or five hits on the space bar or an extra <enter>,) '@@'
looks funny for a location stamp, I'd suggest '[...]', and only use question
marks in questions. I'm not sure why you used question marks instead of
double quotes.
Is is a different method that you learned from where you are from? It looks
like it may have been a glitch.
@@Manhattan 1997@@
It was a cloudy night in Manhattan and people were hurrying home to beat
the rain that seemed imminent. All of a sudden a loud roar was heard
followed by a loud explosion. A huge pillar of smoke arose from the roof
of
the nearby Nightstone building.
?This city sure has gotten worst since those gargoyles came here,? one
pedestrian remarked to his companion as they rushed away from the scene.
Moments before:
A red headed female figure bursts out of the door leading to the roof. As
the figure comes into the light of the building?s helicopter landing we
see
the figure is not entirely human. Her blue skin matches to the color of
the
night sky, one of her three clawed hands holds a bag the other a large
laser
rifle, her tail lazily waves back and forth, and her wings are open and
ready for action. Her lovely face held it?s usual sneer. The figure, which
was better known as a gargoyle, was Demona.
?Tonight,? she began. ?These miserable humans die tonight. I grow weary of
them. I grow weary of all of them, but most especially that constant
annoyance Elisa Maza.?
?That is a harsh way to feel Demona,? a voice called out. ?Perhaps you
need
to have a better outlook on life.?
Demona spun quickly in the direction of the voice with her rifle cocked
and
aimed. ?Who are you?? she asked. ?Your life depends on it.?
From out of the shadows walked a beautiful woman with light green skin and
long hair down to her waist. ?Hello Demona,? she stated. ?I am Titania.?
Demona?s eyes widen slightly as she took a step back. ?What do you want??
she questioned. ?Is this about that your mirror?? Demona remembered the
A red headed female figure bursts out of the door leading to the roof. As
the figure comes into the light of the building's helicopter landing we see
the figure is not entirely human. Her blue skin matches to the color of the
night sky, one of her three clawed hands holds a bag the other a large
laser
rifle, her tail lazily waves back and forth, and her wings are open and
ready for action. Her lovely face held it's usual sneer. The figure, which
was better known as a gargoyle, was Demona.
"Tonight," she began. "These miserable humans die tonight. I grow weary of
them. I grow weary of all of them, but most especially that constant
annoyance Elisa Maza."
<<This sounds very flat, with no emphasis. "Tonight!" she began to speak to
herself angrily. "These miserable humans die... tonight!">>
"That is a harsh way to feel Demona, a voice called out. "Perhaps you need
to have a better outlook on life."
Demona spun quickly in the direction of the voice with her rifle cocked and
aimed. "Who are you?" she asked. "Your life depends on it."
<<suggest "!" since she *is* threatening her life, after all.>>
>From out of the shadows walked a beautiful woman with light green skin and
long hair down to her waist. "Hello Demona," she stated. "I am Titania."
Demona's eyes widen slightly as she took a step back. "What do you want?"
she questioned. "Is this about that your mirror?" Demona remembered the
<<I'm not sure which words processor you are using, but I'd guess that it's
probably MS Word and it's using the directional quote marks. MS Word can
convert .doc's to text, I use File>Save as> and then on the little pull down
option pick "MS-Dos Text with Layout (*.asc)" Once you've saved it, just
rename it to a .txt and then you can attach it easily to the FFML posts
without too much of a hassle.
There's also a little freeware text formater that does pretty much the same
thing, it's a little hard to use. It's called 3FT.EXE and you should be able
to find it without too much difficulty on the internet. It's maintained by
one of the FFML users.
I really don't have the time (or the inclination; bad headache) to go
through the entire story, but those seem to be the only real issue.>>>
Arthur Hansen
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