Subject: [FFML] [C&C] Cranky AnyFic Comments 1 Dec 2000
From: "E.L.Toh" <teloong@cwcom.net>
Date: 12/1/2000, 7:45 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com
CC: Matthew Harrison <musko_no_kaji@hotmail.com>, Jusenkyo Guide <jusenkyoguide@lycos.com>, OnFire4jc <onfire_4jc@hotmail.com>, "Joshua 'Gargoyle' Trujillo" <gargoyle@glasscity.net>

The release of CoaEG 18 was a real boost to my system and I

managed to get the following done a few days ago... then my

ISP's email server went berserk on me and filled my inbox with

loads of corrupt mail. have JUST managed to get back email 

access. needless to say, am being super-cranky now...





[EVA][Dark/Horror] Copying Error

by Matthew Harrison <musko_no_kaji@hotmail.com>



Hmmm. A cross between Mekat's fic 'Pariah' and 'Silence of the 

Lambs' was my general impression. Basically, a new Rei clone

goes berserk.



Not the most original of story premises but still, the execution

is very good so the story conveys plenty of tension, excitement

and gut-wrenching horror. The opening passage was particularly

impressive. That's what I call a story hook!





[EVA][Dark] Whack Pack: Beginnings

by Matthew Harrison <musko_no_kaji@hotmail.com>



Female 'friend' of Shinji is murdered but subsequently let off

on a technicality. The mild-mannered Shinji decides to take the

law into his own hands. Gendou, surprise surprise, approves. Is

Shinji getting a new part-time job?



A short prologue type introduction to a series-in-being. Again,

Mr. Harrison's execution can't be faulted though this time I

just had great difficulty accepting the story premise. Like the

murdered girl whom Shinji had strong feelings for and the meting

of his vengeance. Not really quite my conception of Shinji, even

with the crime, injustice and taunting. But I will really have to

see how the series unfolds before I'm able to make up my mind on

how I feel.





[EVA][Lime] You want to do what?

by Jusenkyo Guide <jusenkyoguide@lycos.com>

http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/6549



Manic comedy with special effects, lots of external references

and some sexual innuendo. Who is stealing all the Sailor Moon

stuff in Tokyo-3?



Favourite lines include the scene when Shinji tries to escape

from Misato's cooking through the window and the following:



        "And just what would I want with Wonder Girl at this 

time of night." Her eyes narrowed, "And what do YOU want with 

her this time of night?"

        "Away from you and in her arms," Shinji almost said, but

realized that he didn't have a spine and saying that would 

be wildly out of character for him. (SD Skuld: Like this whole 

story isn't?)



Pretty good for a laugh but the really long lines of text were

quite a pain in the ass. 60-70 ASCII characters per line would

be nice, wouldn't it?





[EVA] The Fate of Hearts - Chapter 4

by Joshua 'Gargoyle' Trujillo <gargoyle@glasscity.net>

http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Towers/1509



NGE in the age of the Roman Empire. In this chapter, Mistura/Misato

and Caelus/Shinji reflect on their relationships with their fathers.

The grand ambitions of Effero/Gendou are hinted at. I assume that

this takes place in the age of empire, after the fall of the Roman

republic? And have Lagena/Asuka and Flustra/Rei stumbled upon 

Caelus/Shinji's strategic plan/diary/gay porn collection? ^_-



Another interesting chapter that read well and quickly! Looking

forward to more!





[EVA] Behind the Scenes: 01

by OnFire4jc <onfire_4jc@hotmail.com>	

http://lcp.minos.net



NGE in the process of filming captured mockumentary style.

This looks a lot like Greg 'Uncle Fester' Sandborn's 'Just

Another Day on the Set' which subjected the Ranma cast to the

same treatment which was written years ago.



However the latter was, in my mind, clearly the superior. The

parody in Behind the Scenes: 01 seems to have been considerably

diluted by the use of script as a result of the author's choice

to use an interview format. I'm not against script per se but

I felt that conventional narrative would be a much richer medium

to highlight the quirks and character variations of the cast.



IMHO the greatest comic potential of this type of story comes

from how different the actor's persona is from the on-screen

character and how it affects their subsequent interaction off

the set. There's a lot of potential in this idea that this fic

merely manages to hints at. Also, this first part is just feels

... well, difficult to sustain.



Not to be entirely negative, the quote from Maya at the start

and the interview with Rei were really enjoyable, pointing at

the promise that this idea has. Good luck!



that's all for now.

still have got loads of fics on disk to read.

hopefully will get to them sometime soon.



elt







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