rob reynolds wrote:
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The Gate Keeper
Chapter One: The Deal
By Robert Reynolds
Cerubus was bored out of his mind. It had been some six hundred years
since he was last allowed to visit the mortal realm. Being the Gatekeeper
for Hades was rather dull work now that Heaven and Hell were getting all the
followers. Mortals could be so picky about where they spend the rest of
eternity. Cerubus would have walked out on his post three hundred years
ago but he made a vow to Hades that he would stand watch at the gates in
exchange for Immortality. What a stupid deal, It was fun for the first two
hundred years but after that it got dull.
Cerubus watched as that stupid three headed dog walked around the tower
again. Why did everyone think that �HE� was that stupid mutt? Crazy
They don't. The dogs name is "Cerebus"
Greeks, ever since Apollo told that little lie about the dog everyone thinks
they can sneak in and out of the underworld without fighting with that damn
dog.
You didn't say what you meant to say.
They forget that Cerubus was a powerful Shaman in his tribe and now he
knows so much about magical spells he was able to raise skeletons from the
ground. He could even control the very weather itself. Then again Cerubus
was also lonely. Hades as well as immortality promised him a wife. What a
liar Hades was. Cerubus put his hands back into the black robes he always
wore and pulled out a small loaf of bread and a piece of dried meat and
started to eat as he sat down on the floor of the tower.
Cerubus snapped his fingers as he thought of an Idea of how he could visit
No need to capitalise "idea" or "mortal"
the Mortal world. The dog started to bark at one of the angels that lived
in Heaven. The angel looked at the three-headed dog and smiled waving it
away without fear. Cerubus stood up from the spot in the floor where he was
sitting to eat and tossed the bread at the dog hitting it in the center
head.
�Why hast thou come to this place Angel?�, Cerubus called down to the
visitor. The Angel smiled and spread its wings and took off to join Cerubus
in the top of the tower. Cerubus moved back to let the Angel land as he
reached into his robes and pulled out a dagger. �Answer me, thy master hath
no reign here.�
�I come in peace dear friend�, The angel answered in a sweet melodic tone.
If Cerubus were mortal again he would have fallen to his knees from the
calming effect of that voice. The angel folded its white wings behind its
back and found a chair to sit in. Cerubus was getting angry with his
Visitor. Not even Cerubus sat in a chair he felt that he was unworthy of
Or "visitor"
sitting in a chair.
Why?
�Why hast thou come? Thy master is not my master�, Cerubus growled as the
angel sat there smiling as Cerubus started to pull some more things from his
robes. One day Cerubus thought I would have to try to empty this robe of
all this junk. �Answer me foul Creature!�
comma after "me". No need to capitalise "creature"
�I have come to see if you would like to join my master. After all Hades
is not as full as it once was.�, The Angel smiled as it pulled a small
parchment from a small sack. �My master can grant you anything your heart
wants Cerubus, Hades cannot.�
That sounds more like Satan than God.
�Thy Master is a lair. He would try to take my immortality from me. He
God is a hideout?
has told me so himself. I refuse to become a normal human again. I have
lived to long to just give up and die like some coward.�
�MY MASTER IS NO LAIR�; the Angel stood up and held out the parchment for
Cerubus to look at. Cerubus took the paper and said a word causing it to
burst into flames. The Angel�s eyes narrowed as it looked at Cerubus. �Why
did you do that?�
�Same reason I will turn thee to stone if thou refuse to depart under thy
own power.�
�You don�t have the power to do that Cerubus I have meet you before three
Run on sentence
hundred years ago you could hardly cast that simple fire spell�, The Angel
smiled as it reached into the bag for another paper. Cerubus was getting
annoyed with his visitor and it was starting to show on his face.
�What was once living from flesh and bone NOW BECOME AS STONE!�, Cerubus
Angels aren't made from flesh and bone.
yelled as the angel looked at him in shock as its body started to turn into
a smooth marble form. Cerubus reached into his robes and pulled out a mace
with a large metallic head on the top of the shaft. The Angel�s face was
not twisted with pain as its body slowly turned into a statue. The face
twisted into a Horrifying mockery of its former beauty showing great pain as
"horrifying"
the spell finished turning the Angel into a statue. Cerubus shattered the
statue with his mace and tossed the statues head off the Tower nearly
hitting the three headed dog in the process.
*************
Cerubus walked to the gates of the Dark Castle of Hades with a slight grin
on his face he could hear the ancient guards talking about how happy Cerubus
looked. Must be some trouble if Cerubus is smiling like that. Cerubus
stopped in front of the gates looked at the little demon watching the gates
of the castle keep.
�Tell our Master that I wish to see him�, Cerubus warmly told the demon.
The Demon looked at Cerubus and shuddered to think what this Immortal human
could do to him if he did not listen to him. The demon ran inside the
castle as fast as its little legs would carry it. A few minutes later a
human wearing Dark heavy Armor walked to the Gates. Cerubus bowed slightly
Do not Randomly capitalise.
to show respect for Lord Hades. Hades stood and looked at Cerubus as the
Hades isn't human.
little demon came crawling back out to take his place at the gate once more.
�Why are you here Cerubus?�, Hades voice boomed. Cerubus was unimpressed
by his voice now after nine hundred years of service. Hades saw the smile
on the face of Cerubus.
�My Lord, I want to visit the mortal world. I want a bride.�; Cerubus
turned a slight shade of red when he said the word bride. Hades looked at
him and wondered if that what he was really after.
�How long are you going to look for one Cerubus?�
�I don�t know my lord, as long as it takes to find a bride who will want to
be immortal with me. �
�Cerubus you have served me for nine hundred years, I will allow you at
Since nobody worshipped the Greek gods in 1100 A.D. Cerebus wouldn't have got much
work.
least two hundred years to find a bride to be with you. You may go if you
wish�
Oh please. I seriously doubt that Hades' vacation policy would be that liberal.
How about one tenth of his time served?
�Thank you Lord Hades�
Cerubus bowed slightly as Hades turned away from him and walked back inside
the castle. The demons looked at one another and turned back to their own
works. Cerubus smiled and walked to the entrance of the Underworld.
Charron was giving him a hard time as he crossed on the ferry. Cerubus was
happy he would get to see what was on the surface world and find himself a
bride and see what new magic could be learned.
************
�Ranma Satome!�, a woman�s voice could be heard screaming. A young man ran
down the street wearing a red shirt and green pants with a rather mean
looking woman waving a giant spatula around as it if that was a weapon.
Just when the boy thought he was safe another young woman wearing a school
outfit turned around the corner to catch the young boy and pulled him down.
�Ranma no Baka!� The second girl screamed into the ear of Ranma. The
first girl just hit him in the head with her spatula. Ranma sat there
wondering what he had done this time to get these two mad at him. Akane was
just mad he would not eat her cooking and with that poison who could blame
<Yawn> Yet another fanfic starts with a quarrel about Akane's cooking.
him? There was loud boom from behind them in the park, as a large doorway
seemed to just appear out of thin air.
Cerubus walked out of the doorway wondering where he was, IT was certainly
bright wherever he was. IT had been two hundred years ago when he last saw
No need to capitalise both letters of "it".
the sun. The trio stood there and looked at this strange man as he stood
there looking at the trees and the birds. He was dressed in strange black
robes and wore wire frame glasses that sat at the tip of his nose. He had a
slight smile on his face as he took a deep breath.
Cerubus pulled out a map from his robe and started to look at it when the
two girls shoved Ranma towards him. Ranma slowly walked up to the man and
waved his hands in his face to get his attention. Cerubus looked up at the
young man and smiled.
�Who are you�, Ranma asked with a look in his eyes trying to figure out if
Question mark
this was the guy who taught Moose to hide all that stuff in his robes too.
�Fetara cerotais combkiena?�, The man replied to Ranma. Ranma looked at
him and almost face faulted. The man snapped his fingers as he pulled a
book from his robes and read a few lines out of it and looked at Ranma .
�Where is this place�, the man spoke clearly so Ranma would understand
him.
Ranma was suprised that this weird man couls speak japanse so well after
"could"
talking to him in what sounded like he was speaking how Kuno The Blue
Blunder would after he kicked his butt.
--------End of part one of CH1---------------------------------
Cerubus is not a Mousse Clone or even a wannabe Mousse. Although the robe
joke will keep poping up from time to time. And the Kuno jokes will pop up
too.
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