Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fic][Ranma] Eerily Plausible 1
From: "D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
Date: 8/4/2000, 11:53 PM
To: "FFML" <ffml@fanfic.com>, "Douglas MacDougall" <dougmacd@dougmacd.net>

MUAAAAHAHAHAHAAA!!! Tremble, foolish fanfickers, before the twisted
might of another MacDougall-Roeder C&C exchange. Admission fee
non-refundable, of course.

Possible lime warning... meaning there might be situations suggested
of sexual acts in this C&C.



  (This is a repost of a fic originally titled "Unseen World.")

  While the events portrayed in this story are original,
  they present,
  for the [second] time in a fan fiction, the true, untold
  background
  stories of Ranma 1/2, as described by Rukimo Tashahaki
  herself in an
  exclusive interview!

Hmmm, a plea to be canonized? ^_-





  "Eerily Plausible"                             A Ranma
  1/2 Fanfic Series
  by Douglas MacDougall

  For Mature Readers.

Heh.



  Part 1:  A New Evil Wakes


      "Ranma!  You've got to help me defeat the panty thief
  that's been
  plaguing our fair city!"

      "Sure thing, old man!"

      "Ag... Ack... What... Are you doing to your master, you
  ungrateful..."

      Ranma lifted his foot off Happosai's flattened head.
  "I thought you
  wanted me to stop the panty thief?"

      "Not ME, you idiot!"

      "I dunno, you look like a panty thief to me..."
  Ranma dug his heel
  back into the elder's head.

      "Why you...!"  The disgruntled martial arts master
  pulled a small
  bomb from his gi and tossed into Ranma's hands.  "Happo
  Fire Burst!"

      "Wak!"  Ranma was blasted out of the room moments
  before the members
  of the Tendo household made their way in.

Very conveniently, too, I might add. ^_^



      Nabiki raised an eyebrow.  "A NEW panty thief?"

      "How terrible!"  Kasumi noted, sipping some tea.

Nabiki:  How does life become terrible just by adding one additional
panty thief, Oneechan?

Kasumi:  Why, demand for new wear will exceed the supply! The cost
of lingerie will skyrocket!

Nabiki:  ERK!

Kasumi:  Why, panties will start going for several thousand yen!

Akane:  ERK!!

Kasumi:  The cost of a brassiere will increase geometrically with
cup size!

Ranma:  ERK!!!

*BOP!*

Akane:  What are YOU erking for?! You probably don't even understand
what she meant!

Ranma:  HEY! I passed math last year!! And mine boobs are MUCH
bigger than--

*PUNT!*

Ranma:  [fading into distance]  Kawaiikuneeeeeeeee...

^_^



      Happosai straightened out his clothes and sat down
  cross-legged on
  the mat (with a few pillows added for extra height).
  "Indeed.  As I was
  making my daily patrol last night,

Intentional juxtaposition of conflicting adjective versus noun;
daily:night? I have no problem with it, but you've niggled me about
that sort of thing a few times. ^_-



  I noticed the fiend

"Fiend" is such a great word...



  skulking about
  the balconies of the Twin Towers apartment complex.  He
  was moving from
  porch to porch, snatching ladies' underthings as he went.

RANMA:  You old fart!! You were in front of a MIRROR!!

HAPPI:  [Tosses Ranma around like a ragdoll with his pipe]  Cheeky
Boy! This was AFTER the mirror incident!



      "It was horrible!  He wore the darkness as if it were
  cloak, and
  moved like a cat!  His feet found purchase anywhere, but
  did not make a
  sound.  I could see his unnaturally large eyes absorbing
  the light, no
  doubt allowing him to see in the dark."

      Akane had since sat down to listen to the story, and
  a smoking Ranma
  crawled in to join her.

Shall I expound on the dangers of smoking to one's health, not to
mention the Happo Daikarin to same? :P



      "Of course, I could not let such a creature threaten
  the innocent
  maidens of the complex!"

      "And their panties," noted Ranma.

      "Of course.,"

course,"



  nodded Happosai solemnly.  "So without
  a moment's
  hesitation (that is, after I... um... collected my strength)..."

He doesn't even pause, does he? ^_^



      Akane rolled her eyes.

      "...I attacked the thief.  If I thought him catlike
  before, now I
  knew it.  He leapt instantly out of the way, arching his back and
  performing a perfect backflip, landing softly on the
  ground.  His body
  bent and twisted with a contortionist's ease.  I could
  barely keep track
  of his silhouette.

      "After I put the bra he was about to steal into a...
  safer place, I
  leapt down and confronted him.  'Who do you think you
  are?' I asked.
  'Don't you know that you are intruding on the grounds of
  Happosai, the
  Master of the Anything Goes School of Martial Arts?!'
  But he didn't say
  a word.

      "Since it didn't like

"Since it didn't look(?) like


  it was going to be a very
  interesting fight, I
  decided to end it quickly with a Fire Burst.
  Unfortunately, he batted
  it out of the air like a ball of yarn and back at me!  Of
  course, I was
  completely unharmed.  However, I decided to take a few
  minutes to...
  intensely meditate upon the situation and decide a course
  of action.

:)


      "While I was uncon-- (er) in my meditative state, the
  thief had
  started to tie me up.  I don't know why.  Everyone seems
  to want to tie
  me up.  Why is that?  Do they think I'm into bondage?  I
  mean, just
  because I'm a virile old man--"

Soun and Genma pull out a one-thousand page dissertation,
enumerating the various benefits of a bound Happousai...

Kodachi:  May I see that?

Ranma:  [bigsweats]



      Ranma shouted, "We don't care about that, you old freak!"

      "No need to be rude, Ranma."  Happosai bludgeoned him
  with smoking
  pipe.

with *his* (or) *the* smoking pipe.



  "Anyway, the burglar had started to tie me up when
  I woke-- (that
  is), when I snapped out of my meditative state.  The fool
  had fallen
  right into my trap!

Clever devil, that Happi!



      "As I'm sure you all know, close combat is a specialty of the
  Happosai School of Anything Goes Martial Arts.  No one
  alive can stop
  these babies!"  Happosai wiggled his wrinkled fingers.  Ranma
  unconsciously scratched his chest.

LOL!!!



      "I went into Mr. Bondage with righteous fury, quickly
  driving him
  back.

Suggest:  "I tore into Mr. Bondage... ('Went', in this instance, has
interesting connotations that I don't think are likely to be
accurate. ^_^)



  His belated attempts at defense didn't help at
  all.  'Give up,
  boy!' I cried, poking him in the chest with my pipe.
  'You're no match
  for me.'  But he only hissed.  I was about to strike a
  final blow with
  my pipe when I suddenly became disoriented.  He appeared
  to be pulling
  something out from under his collar.  No doubt it was some magical
  trinket that was affecting me.  In my daze, he was able
  to get in a
  lucky kick and knock me into the air.

      Happosai started to frown.  "I landed in the canal,
  and by the time
  I got back, the pervert and my precious collection were gone!"  He
  started crying, "Ranma, you've got to help me get my
  collection back!
  There's no telling what an unscrupulous type like him
  might do with
  them!"  Somehow the ancient master had managed to splash
  Ranma and was
  now clinging to her bosom.

      "Aaaah!  Get OFF!!"

HAPPI:  Well, if you insist...

[omit scenes of attempted... well, you get the picture. And if you
didn't, get right up to the monitor screen... Yeah, see those
pixels? No? Closer, then. Closer... *POW!*]



  Ranma tried peeling him off, but
  he was more
  tenacious then normal.  She started running around the house.

      "So there's ANOTHER pervert in Nerima!"  Akane made a
  fist.  "Well
  it stops here!  We don't have to take this anymore!"

      Soun and Genma were now in the room.  "A pervert even
  worse than the
  Master."  Genma scratched his chin.  "Who would have
  thought of it?"

      "Indeed, Saotome.  And who would want to?"

      "Well said, Tendo, well said."

:j  The wags have spoken on this matter, so there's nothing more to
be said. :)



      Akane stomped as she got up.  "I'm going to stop this
  new panty
  thief!"

      "What?"  Soun's jaw dropped open.  "But Akane..."

"But, Akane..."




      "There's enough perverts here already!"  Ranma and
  Happosai stopped
  running around the house and glanced in at Akane.  After
  they satisfied
  themselves that she wasn't talking about them, they
  returned to their
  business.

      "But Akane, what if the pervert comes after you?  You
  know how you
  attract this sort of thing..."  He tried to ignore
  Akane's sub-vocalized
  growl.

LOL!



      "Just leave this to Ranma."

      "THAT pervert will probably only make him stronger!"
  Outside, faint
  voices could be heard.  "Hotcha!"  "Hey!  Don't touch
  that, you old
  goat!"

      "Uh... Well then, we'll come protect you!"

      "What?"  Genma hadn't signed on for this!

      "We have to protect my daughters!"

      Nabiki looked at him with half-lidded eyes.  "And how will you
  protect Kasumi and me if you're off with Akane?  We're not martial
  artists.  How will we protect ourselves if the panty
  thief finds this
  house full of beautiful, young maidens, all alone... Unprotected?"

      "Oh, my!"

      "I'LL protect you bab-- erk."  Nabiki's upraised foot
  implanted into
  Happosai's descending face.

She's goooood.



  Boy-type Ranma came running
  around the
  corner steaming and dripping wet.  He grabbed the dazed master and
  started tying him up.

      The dazed master spoke in a small voice, "i told you
  i'm not into
  bondage..."

      "Shut UP!!!"  Ranma beat the ball of rope holding the Master.

      "i'll be good..."

      Soun was still upset.  "Akane, are you sure you won't
  stay here?"

      "No way!"

      "But I can't just leave your daughters alone, Akane..."

Did you mean 'sisters' instead of 'daughters'? Not sure who's
speaking here, but I assume it's Soun.



      "Dad, I care take care of myself..."

      "Who're you kidding, Akane?" said Ranma.  "Just leave
  everything to
  me.  I'll take care of it.  I'm used to dealing with perverts."

      "It takes a pervert to catch a pervert?"

      Soun nodded,

nodded.



     "Yes, leave this to Ranma."

      Ranma realized something.  "Hey!"  He glared as

at



  Akane.

      "Dad, I'm not leaving this to Ranma.  He can't stop
  perverts; he
  just attracts them.  We have to send a message!"

      "But..."

      "Who're you calling a pervert, tomboy?"

      Although taking a beating from a prospective fiancee
  is expected as
  part of the path of a true martial artist, Genma didn't feel like
  watching his son get pummeled again.  "Why don't we form a posse?"

      Soun and Akane looked at him.  "A what?"

      "A posse.  We'll all get together, even Kasumi and
  Nabiki, and go
  out on patrol.  We'll be able to protect each other, and
  when we find
  the panty thief, he'll see just how many people are against him."

      Soun was ecstatic, "An angry mob!  That's a wonderful idea,
  Saotome!"

HAHAHAHA!!! Well, so much for a rational response to the crisis. ^_^




      "Of course, Tendo," Genma grinned.

      Akane was frowning.  An angry mob?  Then she grinned.
   The more the
  merrier, right?  "I'm going to make some calls!"

      "It's settled then," said Soun,

Soun.



  "We'll form up in the
  dojo and start
  our patrol.  Make sure all your underwear's locked up!!!"

      Nabiki rolled her eyes.  Kasumi got up and started
  walking towards
  her room.  "Yes, father."

Ever the dutiful daughter, our Kasumi. She takes locking up her
panties very seriously.

Our fanfic point of view zooms in on Kasumi-chan as she starts to
insert a large, ahem, key into the proper, um, receptacle on her
*cough* chest of drawers. She pauses, then opens the top drawer.

"Brassieres."

She closes the top drawer and opens the second. "Panties."

Opening the third drawer, she looks in and considers the leather,
chains, and other paraphenalia, the purpose for which had escaped
her these long years until she caught Nabiki reading a doujin manga.

"Mother's bedroom things. No wonder Father misses her so much."
*sigh* "Someday, I can share these with MY husband!"

Kasumi wanders off into gingham-and-check housewife dreams of a
perfect life. Let's peak in on her thoughts...

<"DOWN, boy!" *CRACK!*  "DOWN, I SAY!!!" /cue best Inoue Kikuko
dominatrix laugh...>

Uh, let's not and say we did...

Oh, yeah. This is Doug's fic... Where were we?

;p



             *           *           *           *           *

      "I feel stupid."

      "This hurts!"

      "How do you wear these things?"

      "Would you all just SHUT UP!!!"  Ukyo yelled at the top of her
  lungs.  What a useless, whiney bunch of girls...

      "Maybe you're used to have

having


   your breasts crushed flat
  by bindings,
  Ukyo, but the rest of us aren't."  Akane itched at
  wrappings under her
  shirt.  Yuka and Sayuri nodded emphatically.

      "You'll get used to it."

      "I don't WANT to get used to having by

my



  chest flattened!"

      "Gee, Akane, with YOUR chest, who'd not--"  Ranma withered at
  Akane's glance.

      "Well, you all wanted to come after the panty thief.
  If you don't
  want him stealing your bra or groping you, this is the
  best solution..."

      "I still say I could

coulda -or- could've


   taken care of the freak by my--"
   No sooner had
  he said the words them

then


  Ranma was stared down by ALL the
  women in the
  group.  "Nevermind."

"Never mind."



      Akane grinned.  Maybe he could learn, after all.

Don't count your panties before the thief is caught... Yeah.




  The party

While 'party' works okay, I think re-using 'posse' would be more
effective.



   consisted of about twenty people.  Everyone

Suggest:  consisted of about twenty people: everyone



  in the Tendo household
  (except Happosai, who was left tied up), Ukyo, Miss
  Hinomiya,

Ninomiya,


  and a
  bunch of Akane's girl friends from school.  Kuno, Hiroshi
  and Daisuke
  had tagged along when they saw the huge group of cute
  girls, but were
  upset when they all "wrapped up" and wore shirts and
  pants instead of
  more feminine clothing.

Oh, I can't leave this one alone.

Daisuke:  So much for the Kawaii Brigade.

Hiroshi:  Yeah, man. This sucks.

Kunou:  Verily, thou hast the full measure of mine unfulfilled
expectations this 'eve.

Hi & Dai:  ... That actually made sense.

*BOP! BOP!*

Kunou:  [Laying his bokken against his shoulder]  Philistines...



      "Oh, how the heavens weep to see the beauty of such
  fair maidens
  hidden so!  I must protect you from the ravages of the
  creature that
  stalks the night, and put an end to his unholy reign of
  terror."  Kuno
  looked with distaste at his travelling companions.  "And,
  of course,
  protect you from the predations of the lecherous Saotome."

      "Hey!"

      "When this night is done, you shall all be safe and free."  He
  spread his arms wide,

wide.




  "And then I shall DATE you!"

      "Delinquent."  Miss Hinomiya

Miss Ninomiya (although I would suggest going through and changing
all of them to Miss Hinako.)



  drained him dry, leaving
  a withered
  husk of Kuno, and filling out her own adult form.
  Hiroshi and Daisuke
  wisely kept quiet, enjoying the show.

      "Whose stupid idea was this mob, anyway?" muttered
  Ukyo.  They were
  just fighting each other.

      Genma bigsweated.  "Look!"  He pointed into the
  darkness.  "The
  pervert!"

Nodoka:  [Stepping out of the darkness.]  So... My secret is out.

Ranma:  MOMMA?!?!?!

*SPLASH!*  *GLOMP!*

Nodoka:  RANMA-CHAN!!!

Don't ask... Just don't ask... ^_-



      "Where?!?"  As everyone in the mob turned to look, Genma made
  himself scarce.  Only Ranma and Akane weren't tricked.

Ranma: So you CAN learn, huh, tomboy?

Akane:  HEY! That's MY line!!

Ranma:  Biiii-dah! Beat ya to it.

Akane:  [steaming]  ...




      Akane narrowed her eyes.  "Hey, wait, I do see
  something!"

Ranma:  ACK!!! Is my slip showing?!

Minna-san:  ...

Ranma:  Uh... [scratches back of head]  I don't REALLY like wearing
girl's clothing... REALLY!

Akane:  You really do?

Ranma:  Really... HEY!

Akane:  Gotcha, pervert!




  A dark
  form was weaving an uneven path along rooftops

along *the* rooftops



  behind
  them.  Ranma saw
  the figure too.

figure, too.



  "Get him!!!" they cried.

      The two bolted off, leaving the rest of the party
  confused.  Ukyo
  was berating herself for falling for one of Genma's
  stupid tricks, and
  everyone else was wondering whom Ranma and Akane were
  talking about.
  The only 'him' the girls could see were two schoolboys
  and the hapless
  Mr. Tendo...

Where are the Amazons in all this?



      "Uh, ladies...?" asked the mustachioed man.

      Meanwhile, Ranma had vaulted directly to the rooftop
  to intercept
  the stranger.  Unfortunately, as we

he



  went up, the other
  person dropped
  down into the adjacent alleyway that Akane had walked into.

      A solid crack of knuckle against bone could be heard below.
  "Akane?!"  Ranma immediately jumped back down to where he
  had heard the
  noise.  He landed at the other end of the alleyway, which
  was lit by a
  streetlight, above.  Stark shadows were everywhere.

      Akane appeared to be in tears, kneeling on the ground.  Ranma
  grabbed her shoulders and looked her in the eyes.  "Are
  you okay?  Did
  the pervert get you?!?"

      Much to his dismay, Akane shoved him out of the way
  and crawled over
  to a body crumpled by the wall of the building he had
  just leapt down
  from.  A spiderweb of cracks covered the concrete siding.

      "I'm SO sorry, Ryoga!" wailed Akane.  "I didn't know
  it was you!  I
  thought you were the panty thief!"

      "Just what we need," frowned Ranma.

      It's... It's okay, Akane," mumbled Ryoga.  He was
  rubbing the back
  of his head, still a little confused about what was going
  on.  "Wait a
  minute.  hat's

What's



  this about a panty thief?"  He turned to
  glare at Ranma.
  "What has your perverted master been up to while I was gone?!?"

      "He AIN'T my master!"

      Akane was helping Ryoga up.  "It isn't Master
  Happosai.  There's a
  new panty thief who's even better them

than



  him."

      Ryoga shuddered.  "How could you let this happen, Ranma?!"

      "Huh?"

      "This new underwear thief might try to steal Ak-
  Akane's... p- p-"

      "P-Chan?"  Ranma supplied.

      "Shut up!"

HAHAHAHA!!! Nice one, Doug.

[snip]


      "Miss Hinako!?" yelled Akane.

      "No way!!" added Ranma.

      "What's going on, teacher?" asked Akane.

You know, not to throw mud in your eye, ahem, but I found it mildly
jarring that she didn't say: "What's going on, Sensei?".  ^_-



      Ranma's mind was going about as fast as it ever did,
  and he had
  realized something horrible.  "Of course!  It all makes
  sense now!"
  Akane turned to look at him.

      "You've always been able to beat the Master.  And
  after training
  under him for so long you've picked up his perver--"  his

His


  commentary was
  cut off by a quick blow to the head from his teacher.

The student has... BECOME THE MASTER!! HIYOIIIII!!! [imagine weird
Bruce Lee kung fu sounds here]




      "Don't be disgusting, Saotome!  I'M not the pervert here."

Miss Hinako exclaimed, looking pointedly at Akane.

"WHAT?!" Akane shouted. "I'M not the pervert; RANMA IS!!"

"Oh, really, Tendou-kun? I read your entire record the other day."

"EEP!"

"Drilling a hole between the bathrooms in 5th grade. Staging fake
fire drills in the boy's gym while they were changing in 6th grade."
Ranma's jaw was dragging the ground by this point. "Shall I go on,
Tendou-kun? How about last year, the principal's daughter, and why
the middle school was so happy to see you go, hmmm? My, Tendou-kun,
you have a broad palette of tastes. Saotome-kun should fit you to a
tee."

"A... AKANE?!?!" Eyes bugging out of his head, Ranma gaped at Akane,
who had slumped over.

*SPLASH!*

"ARGH!!" Ranma looked up to see a resident blinking as he leaned out
of his window with a washtub in hand.

"Sumimasen! Just washing the dog!" The resident leaned back, out of
sight.

"Oh, yuck!" Ranma said, then stared at Akane, who was staring at her
with a weird light in her eyes. "Uh..."

*ZOOM!*

Before anyone could react, Akane had tossed Ranma-chan over her
shoulder and was now headed for parts better left unsaid.

Hinako-sensei giggled, and Soun, having woken up in time to catch
the grilling his youngest daughter had undergone, said, "Finally!
Something, errr, someone to keep Akane occupied and out of trouble!
We'll have the wedding tomorrow."

"Speaking of getting into trouble, Tendou-sama..." Hinako stalked
over to wear, er, where Soun was sitting on the ground.

"EEP!"

(Ya know, there's a fic in there just crying to be written. ^_^)





      Miss Hinako stepped forward, making a point of giving the
  unconscious Ryoga a wide berth.  As she had moved fully
  into the light,
  they could now see the shape slung over her shoulder.

      Akane rushed forward.  "Dad?!"

      Miss Hinako carefully slid the unconscious, beaten
  form of the elder
  Tendo off her shoulder and onto the ground.

      "Oh, Dad!  The panty thief got him!"

      Ranma recovered from the blow to his head and looked
  at the taller
  man.  He noted that most of the bruises were on his arms,
  indicating
  that he had blocked most of the attacks.  "He must have
  put up a good
  fight.  I didn't think he had it in him."

      Akane held her father's hand and looked at Miss
  Hinako.  "Was he
  able to stop the panty thief?  Or slow him down...  Are my friends
  okay!?"

      Just then Nabiki and Kasumi peered came

Make a choice: 'peered' or, ahem, 'came'.



  into the
  alleyway.  Nabiki
  glanced at the recovering Ryoga, and Akane and Ranma.
  "You guys finish
  your 'martial artist duty' and get the panty thief?"  She
  looked at
  Ryoga as she stepped over him and joined Akane.  "Who would have
  guessed?"

      Akane glanced back at her bruised father.  "Didn't
  the thief come
  after you...?"

      Nabiki smirked.  "Friendly fire, I'm afraid."

      Confusion painted Akane's face.

All the bleeding colors dripped all over her outfit...

"Oh, my! I don't think I can get that stain out!" Kasumi clucked at
Akane's state.

"... It's a FIGURE OF SPEECH!"

"Oh, well, that'll come right out, then." Kasumi beamed at her
sister.

"..."

(Is that a simile? I can never keep that straight.)



      "Those... delinquents started attacking poor Mr.
  Tendo," explained
  Miss Hinako.  "Well, after they trashed the boys.  For
  some reason, they
  thought he was the panty thief.

      "He tried his best, but they all ganged up on him.
  He never had a
  chance against a mob of angry schoolgirls.  So I drained
  the lot of
  them."  She held up a fifty-yen coin meaningfully.

HINAKO:  Which gives us PLENTY of time to get to know one another,
Tendou-sama!

SOUN:  EEP!  I'M NOT A PEDOPHILE!!

HINAKO:  DADDY!!!

SOUN:  ERRRK!!!




      "Fortunately

"Fortunately,



  father protected us from the drain,"
  supplied Kasumi.

Kasumi supplied.



      Ranma had had enough of explanations.  "Geez, this
  was all a stupid
  idea.  You girls should never have come along.  Just let
  me take care of
  this myself."

      "Ranma's right," agreed Ryoga grudgingly.  He had
  just gotten up and
  had wiped away his nosebleed.  He could only hope that
  Akane hadn't
  seen.  "The thief could strike anywhere while we talk,
  and you girls are
  in danger as long as he is about."

      "Oh, no!" said Akane.

      "Oh dear..." said Nabiki.

      "Oh, my!" said Kasumi.

You need to switch around your 'said's and persons speaking. It
reads like a children's story structured this way.



      Ryoga and Ranma looked at each other dumbly.

      Akane glared at them.  Well, at Ranma, anyway.  "My
  friends are all
  unconscious out there!"  She pointed to the other end of
  the alleyway,
  back from where she had come.

      "They're sitting ducks!" realized Ranma.  He ran out
  to the sidewalk
  and found all of the girls with their houses opened

HAPPI:  YESSIREE!!! It's the semi-annual (that is, whenever it
happens) Nerima Open Bosoms... I mean, Nerima Open House! Come one
perv, come all... in a manner of speaking.

corr:  their blouses opened



   and
  chest wrappings
  missing.  He quickly turned around and found himself facing Akane.

      "I didn't look!"

      "Ranma, what are you doing?  We can't leave them like
  that!  We've
  got to cover them up and get them inside."

      "Wh- what!?"  Ranma stammered.  Ryoga looked even more
  uncomfortable.  Kasumi and Nabiki had started taking care
  of the girls,
  while Miss Hinako carried back Soun's unconscious body.
  Ranma could
  believe

couldn't believe


  what his green-eyed finacee was expecting him to
  do.  "Y- You
  want me to touch their--"

Does Akane have green eyes?! I thought they were brown.



      Akane quickly realized where her stupid fiance's thought

thoughts


  were.
  "What are you thinking?!?  You PERVERT!"  She pulled her
  arm back to
  slap him when her world started spinning at a fantastic rate.

      "Akane!"  Ranma rushed forward to stop Akane's
  blurring top-like
  movement.  What had happened?  He spread his arms wide
  and let Akane
  grind to a halt spinning against him.  His eyes nearly
  popped out of his
  head when he saw her shirt was open and her bindings had
  been removed.
  The strip of cloth must have been yanked off, spinning her like a
  gyroscope.

      Her eyes were rapidly moving right to left, and her
  head was rolling
  around.

Suggest:  lolling around.

[snip]



      Hinako's eyes went wide as she stared into the eyes of her
  assailant.

      Ryoga ran to help her, but the thief leapt up and
  hopped off of the
  teacher's head and onto the rooftops.  Hinako crumpled,
  but Ryoga caught
  her before he she landed against the hard pavement.

HINAKO:  [blinking awake]  Ryouga-san?

RYOUGA:  Uh... yeah?!

HINAKO:  WO AI NI!!!

RYOUGA:  URK!!!

Aye, the dreaded Amazonian Falling Dagger syndrome, declaring a mate
when kept from landing on the ground... hard.




      The thief, in addition to knocking her out somehow,
  had completely
  unbuttoned her one-piece.  He hadn't found anything, though.  Miss
  Hinako's little-girl form hardly needed to wear a bra.
  Then again, as
  Ryoga looked down, he realized this big-girl body most
  certainly did.
  Soon his entire body was beet-red from a full-body blush.

Poor Ryouga. He's get to see more cleavage than any single pervert
in the city.

Daisuke:  MASTER RYOUGA!!!

Hiroshi:  TEACH US!!!

Ryouga:  [running for Hokkaido, but actually ending up in Akane's
bedroom]  AAAAAAAHHHHH-- Akane?

Akane:  [holding her bedsheet over her chest]  PERVERT!!  [rains
assorted objects on him]

Daisuke:  Beuuutiful technique, Sensei!!!

Hiroshi:  A true master of his art!

Ryouga:  AAAAAAHHHH!!! [Jumps through Akane's window, the average
pair following closely.]

Ranma-chan:  [Pokes her head up from behind the sheet.]  Is he
gone?!

Akane:  Yes.

Ranma-chan:  Now, you pervert, where were we?

Akane:  [giggle] You smell like soapy dog... RUFF!

Don't you just love a running gag?  ^_^




      "Look after Akane!" yelled Ranma.  He didn't wait for
  the older
  sisters to respond before grabbing the twitching Ryoga
  away from Hinako
  and leaping onto the rooftop after the thief.  As long as
  he was on his
  tail,

...in a manner of speaking...



  the other girls should be alright.

all right.



  "C'mon, idiot!"
  "Who're you
  calling an idiot, you jerk!"  Ryoga snapped out of his
  daze and started
  struggling, so Ranma let go of him and he landed on the
  next rooftop.
  "I've got to go back and help Akane!"

Need a paragraph break after Ranma speaks. "WOOF!"  :)




      Ranma scowled at him.  "Idiot!  We have to get the
  thief NOW or
  he'll just come and get Akane again later!"  Ryoga seemed torn by
  indecision, but Ranma couldn't wait for a response and
  let the thief get
  away, so he bounded off again.

      Reluctantly, Ryoga found himself agreeing with Ranma (again!).
  "Hey!  Wait up!"  He ran hard to catch up with Ranma, who
  was himself
  pushing hard to catch up with the thief.  The two mostly
  moved forward,
  but due to the layout of the houses, occasionally jumped
  from side to
  side.

      He watched as the pig-tailed boy managed to
  outmaneuver his quarry.
  While the thief jumped left and then forward, Ranma made
  a bigger leap
  to the house forward, and then jumped to the roof on the left.  He
  dropped low and spun his leg where the thief would land,
  but the thief
  managed to avoid the blow, flipping backwards, and
  landing neatly in a
  low crouch.  A bag of booty slung undisturbed over his shoulder.

Fragment. Suggest:  ...low crouch, a bag of booty (ahem) slung...




      Ranma cursed the fact that he had missed, but he
  figured that if
  this pervert was able to beat the old goat, he was bound
  to have a FEW
  tricks.  The crouched form had purposefully landed on the
  side of the
  roof slanted away from the nearby streetlights so as to
  stay in the
  shadows.  Crouched closely against the surface, Ranma
  couldn't gauge his
  height or reach.

      And the eyes.  Happosai had been right.  About the
  only thing he
  could see were the thief's eyes, which were big and
  round.  Not cat-like
  at all, he assured himself.  The pupils were large and
  dark, not slits.
  As he was staring at the thief's eyes, they opened even wider in
  surprise.

      If the thief was surprised, he'd best press his
  offensive advantage.
   "Let go of that sack, you freak!"  He leapt up and
  launched a flying at
  the prone body, but it rolled aside and starting leaping away even
  faster then

than


  before.  After smashing some roof tiles from
  his strike, he
  turned around.

Oh, yeah. NOW I remember who the new panty thief is... ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
^_^



      "He's scared of something..."  Ranma got a cocky
  grin.  No doubt the
  new freak had heard of his fighting skills and knew he
  was no match for
  him.  He started to turn around and continue the pursuit
  when his legs
  were clipped from behind him.

      "Gotcha!"  Vice-like arms held his legs fast.  Lying down and
  fumbling for leverage,  Ranma turned and half-rolled onto
  his side,
  twisting his torso around so he could strike the person
  holding him.

      "Ryoga, you IDIOT!!"  He knuckled the boy in the
  head.  Causing him
  to blink.

head, causing him to blink.



      "Where'd he go?"

      "Let me go, you idiot, he's getting away!"

Suggest:  "Let me go, you idiot! He's getting away!"



  He kicked
  his legs free
  and Got

got


  up.  He paused a moment to find the thief again,
  and started
  running, redoubled

redoubling



  his speed.  He moved so fast that it
  really seemed
  like he was running along the rooftops instead of leaping
  from one to
  the next.  Ryoga quickly followed, so they were running
  neck and neck.
  Ever so slowly they closed the distance, following the
  curving trail
  across the rooftops of Nerima.  When they were only one
  house behind,
  Ranma decided he was close enough to try to make another strike.

      Just as he had the thought, however, a shout from the side
  distracted him.  "I must save Shampoo!"

Yup!



  A barrage of
  chains, knives,
  and training potties shot through the air.  Several of
  them wrapped
  around the thief, but more importantly, iron claws pulled
  the bag off
  his back.  Lingerie and chest-bindings rained from the
  sky to the ground
  below.

HAPPI:  ~o/ "I'm siiiiiinging in the rain..." /o~



      Ranma grinned.  He might be stuck fighting with two
  idiots, but
  there was no way a pervert was going to run away from his
  "haul".  They
  had him, now.

      Mousse landed next to the now-fallen thief and
  grabbed him.  "What
  have you done to my--"  The thief kicked his leg over his head and
  solidly hit Mousse's jaw.  The robed boy traced a perfect
  parabolic arc
  as he fell to the ground, whimpering, "--Shampoo?"

Girls are typically more limber that way. Nice bit of detail.



      Twisting his legs, the thief first spun on his back
  and them

then


  up onto
  his feet, causing the ropes and chains to unwind,
  spinning out and off
  his body.  Ranma and Ryoga ducked the flying items and
  prepared for a
  head-on assault.

[snip]



  at her.  She screwed her eyes shut awaiting a blow when
  water splashed
  on her instead.  She opened her eyes to see the a rudely
  awakened duck
  next to her, and the pervert in front.

      He was about her height, wearing a loose outfit and
  slippers of
  coarse cloth that covered his entire body.

Suggest:  wearing a loose outfit that covered his entire body and
slippers of coarse cloth.



  Only his
  hands were bare.  A
  kerchief was wrapped around his head and under his nose,
  and he was
  wearing (of all things) a cold mask.  His big, dark eyes
  seemed to take
  her in hungrily, and she could imagine a smirk under the mask.

      Glancing at Mousse and the bucket in the thief's
  hands, Akane made a
  quick deduction.  "He must know our weaknesses..."  Being a
  fair-tempered person herself, she rarely got into fights,
  so she hoped
  the thief would not know her style.

      She quickly went into a back stance.  Her left arm
  and leg were
  forward, her right leg below her and right hand held to
  her chest, she
  only presented her side as a target to the thief.

her chest, and she only presented...




  Unfortunately

Unfortunately,



  her
  foot stepped in something round and squishy, throwing off
  her balance.

[snip]



      Were her pressure points being hit?!  That didn't make sense,
  though.  The areas being hit were mostly fatty tissue...
  After a moment
  she realized the thief was poking her almost exclusively
  in the chest
  and rear.  Her battle aura soared with her coiled right
  hand, performed
  a full uppercut on the thief, who was solidly knocked back.

      "PERVERT!"

HAHAHA!!! Akane's a demon if you just know how to bring it out of
her. ^_^



      A small form made a squeaking noise as it fell it
  front of Akane.
  "Oh, NO!!!  P-Chan!"  She tenderly picked up the KO'ed
  piglet.  Glancing
  at her right hand, she realized it wasn't holding her pet
  anymore.  She
  had hurt him again!  Tears filled her eyes. "I'm SO sorry!"

      "Stupid Ryoga."  Ranma finally got up, rubbing his face.

      "Ranma?"  Akane exclaimed.  "Where did Ryoga go?"

      "Watch out!"  Ranma tackled into Akane, moving her
  out of the way as
  the thief descended with raking hands.  Ranma's backside
  caught the
  attack, shedding his shirt.  "Geez, Akane, just get out of here!"

      He turned back to face the opponent, who was in a
  familiar stance.
  One knee in the air, arms up, but hands curled down.
  Where had he seen
  that stance?

      "Nya!"  The thief purred happily.

      "No way!"  yelled Ranma.

      "The Cat-Fist!" added Akane.

      A loud clack announced the arrival of Cologne,
  landing perched atop
  her walking stick.  "Stay back, Son-in-Law.  This one is
  too powerful
  for you."

Ah, Here Comes Granny!  Cologne knows how to make the perfect
entrance.

[snip]


      "Hey, get back here!"  yelled Akane.  She handed P-Chan off to
  Cologne and started attacking the thief.  Cologne just
  blinked, trying
  to decide if she was more startled that Akane was trying
  to fight, or
  that she was now holding a cute little black pig.

Oh, the pig... definitely!  :)



      Dropping the pig on his head,

LOL!



  Cologne hopped forward
  to dissuade
  Akane from her actions.  "You must not fight this one!
  Let the thief
  go."

      "Death to Perverts!!!" was Akane's reply.  Actually,
  she was putting
  up a pretty good fight.  The again,

Then again,



  the thief wasn't
  exactly fighting
  back; he was just looking for an exit, which Akane
  repeatedly moved (or
  leapt) to block.

[snip]



      "Tee-hee! Oh dear!  My blouse seems to be falling
  apart!"  A girl's
  giggling caught everybody's attention.

      "..."  said the thief.

      "Oh, god," said Akane.

      "Son-in-Law," sighed Cologne.

      P-Chan flailed.

      Yes, Girl-type Ranma was skipping down the street
  wearing a lacy
  black bra, with the ties of her shirt undone.

Very nice original-flavor Ranma stunt. Cheers!




  Akane
  failed to suppress
  the jealousy she felt at the contrast of the black
  brassiere against
  Ranma's pure, milky-white skin, or how certain parts of
  her fiance's
  anatomy jiggled as she hopped around.

DFR:  WAAAH!!! I'm so PROUD of you, Doug!! You have SEEN THE
LIGHT!!! RANMA-CHAN... *FOREVER*!!!!!!

Doug:  ... Get away from me, you pervert!




      A spot of drool was rapidly making the thief's mask wet.

      "And this bra is soOOOoo tight!  She started fiddling
  with the catch
  in the back, arching backwards and giving everyone a better view.

O_O  Damn! I wanna see!! WAAAH!!!

:P

[snip]



  started to cry.  "Is true!  Shampoo no want to be
  pervert, but can't
  stop!"

      She hugged Ranma about the waist and started bawling.
   "Airen, you
  forgive Shampoo, yes?"  Then she started rubbing her
  cheek into Ranma's
  chest, still crying.

O_O Damn! There are times when I simply despise the written word...
;p




      "Aaaaahhh!"  Ranma freaked at the weird sensations

LOL!!!



  and tried to push
  Shampoo away, but she was too persistent.  Realizing how
  useless Ranma
  was, Akane decided to help, and tried to pry the Amazon
  off her fiance.

      Cologne finally spoke up.  "I had hoped this day
  would never come.
  I worked so hard to prevent it, but it seems it is
  impossible to escape
  fate."

Cherry:  That's what *I* always say!

*PUNT!*

Cherry:  [voice fading]  IT'S FAAAAAteee....



      Soun walked forward.  "What's going on here?"  He
  rubbed at the
  bruises and scratches all over his body.  Miss Hinako
  stood by his side
  and tended him.

But, of course. ^_^



  "What's wrong with Shampoo?"  He pointed
  at the scene
  between Akane, Shampoo, and Ranma.  Akane had gotten
  Shampoo off of
  Ranma, but now she was rubbing her head in Akane's lap.
  Akane yelled at
  Ranma to do something, but she was too busy trying to
  stop a bloody
  nose.

Ranma:  But... But, AKANE!! You'll just pound me if I do what I
hafta to get her off on-- UHHH, off of you!

Akane:  ...



      Mu-Mu Chan was paralyzed with fear and dismay.

And assorted sensations a duck shouldn't be capable of
experiencing...




  P-Chan put a
  reassuring hoof

trotter



  on his back.  He had been there many
  times, himself.

      "The story begins over eighty years ago..."  The
  girls (and two
  boys) formed a circle around the centenarian.  Only
  Hiroshi and Daisuke
  paid attention to Akane, Ranma, and Shampoo.

^_^



      P-Chan wanted to help Akane, he really did, but he
  was scared about
  being punched, stepped on, or being used as another
  punching glove.  And
  that kettle of hot water was still too close for his liking.

      So he settled for being picked up by Sayuri, who
  scratched behind
  the ears.  "Look, it's Akane's pet piggie.  He's so
  CUTE!"  He stretched
  and bwee'd contentedly.

Oh, piglet, thy name is fickle!




      Looking at Sayuri and the poor dumb bird, Yuka
  decided she wanted a
  pet, too.  She picked the duck up and sat next to Sayuri,
  listening to
  Cologne's story.  Mu-Mu Chan decided that he liked his "nest" and
  blissfully rubbed his head against Yuka's chest as she
  stroked his neck.

This story is just crawling with perverts, isn't it? In a way, it
makes Shampoo less of a "villain" and more of just an extreme case.
^_^  Happi, too, for that matter.



      "As you know, when he was young, Happosai came to our
  village.  He
  stole our ancient treasures and ran off.  A young, proud
  Amazon, I took
  it upon myself to stop him, but I was unsuccessful."

      Cologne sighed.  "Rather, he beat me.  In single
  combat.  According
  to Amazon law, I had to give him the Kiss of Marriage, and we were
  married the very next day..."

      Ranma boggled.  "No way!  The old goat is your
  great-grandfather,
  Shampoo?!?"

      "Is too, too tragic!"

*GLOMP!*

Shampoo:  But is TOO, TOO MUCH FUN!!!

Ranma:  AIEEE!!!

Shampoo:  Oh, stop it. You know you love it.

Ranma:  Well...

Akane:  RANMA?!?!

Shampoo:  Pervert Gi-- Um, Akane-chan join in, too! More is merrier,
no?

Akane:  Well...




      Akane strained at the Amazon, "Get OFF!"

Shampoo:  Is what TRYING TO DO, but AKANE NOT HELP!!!

Akane:  ARGH!!! That's NOT what I MEANT!!

Shampoo:  But is what Shampoo meant, right?

Akane:  Well, yeah, but-- QUIT CHANGING THE FOCUS OF THIS
ARGUMENT!!!!

Shampoo:  Tee-hee!

Ranma-chan:  Tee-hee! ... Uh, why did I just do that?

Akane:  ...




      Cologne continued her story.  "As is the way of
  things, we had a
  child but nine months later."  The group shuddered.
  Better to leave
  thoughts of the wrinkled mummy unspoken!  "Happosai left
  during his
  girl's childhood, and the village was glad that his
  influence was gone.
  My daughter was a powerful martial artist, who soon grew
  up, married,
  and bore Shampoo's mother.  She died in childbirth.

      "As for Shampoo's departed mother...  Well, it wasn't
  until she had
  grown up and had a child of her own that her symptoms
  become apparent.
  She started to have an unnatural fascination with
  undergarments, and an
  overpowering desire to... feel... other women."
  Cologne's face wrinkled
  it

in



  distaste, scaring not a few of the observers.

:)

[snip]


      "Damn."  Shampoo had crawled out from under Akane.

O_O




  Ranma and Akane
  struggled to contain the Amazon once again.

      "So my grand-daughter, Shampoo's mother, had grabbed
  another warrior
  during a fight it

in



  a... compromising position.  No one
  thought much of
  it, other then

than



  to think she was being a little cruel to use such a
  distracting tactic.  Still, all it

is



  fair in the art of
  war.  But she
  knew.  She knew she could not hold it off anymore.
  Having tasted the
  forbidden fruit, she had to have more.

[snip]



      "Hey!" shouted Akane.  "Excuse me?" added Ukyo.

      "--And she has not been able to have... close contact with his

  girl-type body.  As such, she had no outlet for the urges
  she had been
  feeling the past few months.  She still has enough
  resistance not to
  grab a real girl," Cologne made a point of not looking at the
  menage-a-trois occurring nearby, "But

"but



  she couldn't stop
  herself from..."
   Cologne started to break down, sniffling, "...from
  collecting women's
  underwear!  Oh, the horror!  The horror!"

      "An amazing story," noted Soun.  "But it explains so much."

      "Indeed, Tendo."

"Indeed, Tendo,"



  nodded Genma.  Ukyo blinked.  Where
  had he come
  from?

      Akane had finally managed to pour some water on
  Shampoo and dump her
  in a wicker basket.  Ranma eyed the shifting basket
  warily as sounds of
  a cat yowling and sharpening her claws could be heard from within.
  "Well, that's one less 'fiancee' Ranma has to deal with,"
  Akane smiled.

      "Yeah!" chimed in Ukyo.  "My Ranchan's not going to marry a
  pervert!"

      "Yes," confirmed Akane, staring meaningfully at the
  crossdresser.

Touche.



      Ranma was too busy watching the basket to comment.

      Cologne chuckled.  "Ah, but girls, Son-in-law is the
  only one for
  Shampoo."

      "And just why is THAT?" asked Ukyo.

      "Why, Ranma is the only one who can satisfy Shampoo's
  perverted
  nature without really being perverted.  No one can blame
  Shampoo for
  grabbing her husband's breasts, or making a collection of
  his panties
  and bras, right?  This way, we don't have to worry about
  her terrorizing
  innocent girls."

      "..."

      "..."

Oops! The fly in the ointment.

Akane: Well... that sorta makes sense...

Ukyou:  Yeah... I guess...

Soun and Genma just gape.




      "What?!?"  Ranma didn't like the sound of that.  "No
  WAY am I going
  to stay a girl!  I'm gonna find a cure, you old ghoul.
  And I'm SURE as
  hell not gonna wear a bra or panties for no one!"

      "I think not, Son-in-Law."  Cologne swung her stick,
  and poked it
  rapid-fire into various points along Ranma's chest.

      "Wha...?"  Dread filled Ranma.  "What did you do to
  me THIS time?!?"

      "That was the Cracked Leather Shiatsu Technique.
  From now on, your
  chest is supersensitive to being pulled or stretched.  If
  you turn into
  a girl, the weight of your own breasts will bring you
  unbearable pain!"

      "N- No way..."  But she could tell.  Already the top
  of her chest
  was getting mighty uncomfortable.

      "Ranma..."

      "Ranma-honey..."

      "Why couldn't this have happened to Akane?  She's so
  flat-che--
  URK!"

HAHAHAHA!

[snip]



      "I must have instinctually known you were my
  descendent during our
  fight last night.  That is why I suddenly lost my fighting spirit.
  Plus, I could never hurt a cutie like you!  Come, let us
  practice the
  family art together!"

      "Ranma belong Shampoo!"

      "Akane!"  A lone red-head struggled against multiple groping,
  pulling attackers.

I'll remind you later, in future chapters of this fic, that Ranma is
a redhead. ^_^




      "I bet you LIKE them doing that to you, you pervert!"

      "Akane?"

      The others had long since walked away, but Hiroshi
  and Daisuke stood
  by the side crying.

      "This is the happiest day of my life!"

      "I TOLD you she didn't dye her hair."

      "help?" whimpered a battered red-head.

Heh.

[snip]


      The same stupid laws that made her marry a STRONG
  man, to get bring
  STRONG genes into the village.  The laws that made her a
  mother of six.
  A grandmother of 45.  A great-grandmother of 311.  And all of them
  beautiful young women with STRONG genes...

Heh.

Very good. A fun story, Doug. Chapter 2 to be flayed, ERRR, C&C'ed
at a later date.  ;p

- Dave

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