In a message dated 6/4/00 4:30:47 PM, rgorman@telusplanet.net writes:
It doesn't work for me. It's not just that you slapped familiar names
on characters who had nothing to do with the original possessors of
those names, it's also a matter of just not caring. This could be
effective as part of a longer story that laid the groundwork for these
people's confrontation, and probably showed the consequences as well,
but as it stands, I don't understand these people, I don't know them,
and I certainly don't care about them. Even then, I'd suggest coming up
with your own names, because the story has nothing to do with Slayers.
You know, it's funny, all the pros, the ones who are serious about fanfiction
as an Art, who wrote in about this, have panned it.
All the ones who do it just to have fun, loved it.
Weird, aint it?
Still, there is enough for a larger story here cept for one problem: this is
like Star Wars, you already know how it ends, what's the point of writing a
backstory? I suppose I should have labled it alt, but the thing I was
shooting for was the emotional punch to the gut when Xelloss' other life was
revealed. In that, if nothing else, I'd like to hope I suceeded.
-Agreeable Komodo
Just Say Yes To Polka Dot Elves Who Wield Carving Knives