Wel, that was a unique take on the 'Ranma becomes a girl' genre of
fanfiction. ^^ I don't believe I've ever seen the idea tackled in this
way, with Ranma stubbornly fighting on to keep his manhood. As said by
Krista it's fits with Canon as Ranma Satome never gives up..:P
In fact I like the whole set-up of Ranma's locking here. It takes a lot of
the cliches in that genre of fanfic and puts them in a new light. Poking
fun at them slightly (Like the Nodoka scene, very well done and very
funny along with the priceless scuba suit idea...:) while keeping the main
focus of the story intact.
I also like how you handled the first person narritive in this story. It
directs the narrtive along greatly, shows a nice picture of Akane as she
adapts to these changes in character (Not just accepting Ranma out right
as a girl as she odes in some fics, but not giving up on him either). And
it also set-ups the fic's ending nicely as the narritive of Akane at the
start gave me a totally different impression of where the story would
go...
Oh, and the ending was really, really, well done. I don't think I've seen
such a take on Jusenkyo curses before, and it creates a unique tragedy
that I found moving on a few levels while still being in character for the
manga. And suberb way to end this fic, and an ending I'll think about for
a while to come.
Top notche job Gary, and thanks for sharing!!
Ja ne!!
Richard Beaubien
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Suzuki Arimi, Mizuno Ami, Aya-san forever!!!! WAI!!!
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