Revenge of the 3 week late C&C.
A quick flip, and Ranma plummeted into the pond.
Bad comma
"You're better, Akane-chan," Ranma-onna commented, twirling
the mallet in one hand, "a *lot* better. But you're still
teishi, and I'm still sensei."
Interesting relationship statement. I wonder how long it will be before
Akane's ultra competitiveness begins to work towards Ranma as well.
"Notes on Kodachi's strategy for the match."
Ranma shook his head. "That ain't exactly honest -"
Exactly. Kodachi's strategy is nothing like honest.
"And I'm not going in there to do anything naughty," she
clarified. "Ranma wouldn't like that - you know how he is.
I'm just trying to ... help him."
She's going to help him get over those pesky inhibitions.
She hadn't known about the nightmares; and, having had to awaken the panda, >Kasumi knew that being with a sleeping Genma was the same as being >unchaperoned.
Methinks you would be better served by a sentence break then a
semicolon.
"LEMME GO!" she cried. "I'M GONNA KILL HER DEAD!! LEMME GO!!
DIE SLUT DIE!! SNARL!!"
She actually said snarl?
This chapter had a lot of fragments and obviously intentional
grammatical errors. Because it was so clear that they were meant to be
that way, I didn't make mention of them. However I would well advise you
to refrain from such thing's in the future, or cut them down
significantly.
Other than that, not much to say really.