Subject: [FFML] Re: [Hime-chan] Pale Reflection
From: Scott Schimmel
Date: 2/13/2000, 9:55 PM
To: Rhea Seraph
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Sorry for responding so late; I was at Katsucon over the weekend,
and just got back.

At 06:35 PM 2/10/00 -0800, Rhea Seraph wrote:
An interesting idea, but it didn't quite make sense for me...If

You're not alone. ^_^;  I need to do some revision.
 
Himeko still has the magic (which she would have had to have had 
to be split into Himeko and Hime-chan in the first place), then 
why didn't anyone from the K. of Magic intervene in this?  It's 
not like Hime hasn't been outright killed before.  I also can't 

True, although it's not quite the same situation.  (And even
if Erika were willing to give Hime-chan half her life -again-,
her father and grandfather might not be...)

Most of the confusion probably comes from the missing backstory.
There was a fair amount of it, but essentially, Hime-chan had
split and subsequently gotten into an accident.  She's not dead
(or the magic would have ended), but might as well be, for all
intents and purposes.  Himeko had assumed her place while others
were searching for a solution.  Recombination might work, or it
might leave Hime-chan comatose, and Himeko nonexistent.  That,
plus the question of what it would mean to Himeko (who by this
time is rather caught up in life), cause them to hesitate, hoping
for a better solution.  It took quite a while to get through all
of this.

I cut it, since the story isn't about Hime-chan or the magic
world.  It's about Himeko, and having all of that present
diluted the point too much.  Besides, it works better as a
brief character study than a multi-part fanfic.

Now I just need to figure out how to add some of that back in
to clarify what's happening, without shifting the focus or
dumping large blocks of backstory on readers.  It should be
manageable.

quite see them waiting ten years to try anything.  

This, I'll admit, is stretching matters (even though "ten years"
is/was meant to be an exaggeration, it's still got to be at
least 6 or 7).  It's necessary for the fic to work at all, though;
Himeko needs the extra levels of emotional maturity.

But it's nice to see a Hime-chan fic!

Thanks, and thanks for the comments.


Scott Schimmel            Ex ignorantia ad sapientium;
                          Ex luce ad tenebras
"You really aren't normal, are you?" - Miki Koishikawa


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