(Shakes head)
Uh...
Right. Okay. First we have a disclaimer.
What else?
Warning! Rei and Hotaru are portrayed 'Out-Of-Character';
They do say swear-words(as many as they *need*);
"Game Over" is *not* hentai;
You've been just warned.
Okay... we've been warned. Now I ask...
What was the point of this?
You warn us that they are acting out of character... is this an excuse
to have them warp completely from their estabished characterization
without having to explain why? And give us a *believable* explanation,
other than "everything I let everyone believe about me is a lie". You
see, when you say they are acting out of character, you essentially
absolve any thought or depth into the changes you inflict on them.
They, especially Rei, turn against everything they believed in...
well... just because.
And as for the gratuitous swearing... you claim they swear as much as
they need to. Well, sorry to say, but that seems like a load of bull to
me. The swearing, as far as I can tell, is in there for the same reason
as the senshi going bad... that is, no reason other than the author's
whim.
So... I ask again, what were you trying to accomplish with this?