After finding his voice again, Kunou spoke. "Alas, I must
congraduate you for mastering the first lesson of ki so quickly. Yet I
must depart to receive my share of education." With that he moved
"I must congratulate you for mastering the first lesson of ki so
quickly. Alas, I must depart..."
power to reduce the darkness of her ki. She was not even sure if she
had
any spiritual power. But since she was a descentant of its owner she
might
Sloppy formatting. "descendant". "its owner" is probably a bad way to
put it, since her grandmother hardly had an exclusive patent.
Seeing a young boy in the doorway was not in his expectation.
Even for Kuno, that's clumsy phrasing.
"But I will honor your memory and trained myself to be a samurai like
you.
"train"
She grabbed her family sword and unshealthed it. Looking at the
glowing blade in front of her, she wondered what kind of mess she had
gotten herself into.
"unsheathed"
Soon she formed a plan to bring Ranma back to normal. She
pulled out her trusty hammer and with a vertical swing on the head she
smashed Ranma onto the ground.
Let me get this straight. Your Akane doesn't need to have Ranma say
something or do something to hit him. She'll hit him because he isn't
doing anything?
Do you really think that Ranma insults Akane every morning and evening
as they go to and from school?
You did not portray Akane as a violent tomboy. You portrayed her as a
brutal psychotic who is a deranged menace to all around her. A
murderess. Evil incarnate. The only thing she didn't do is kill Shiori
and eat her. The only question I have is how she has stayed out of a
hospital for the criminally insane this long.