I don't really see the lime in this, but it's got potential. Keep up the
good work.
I really like the way you used Tofu to give us an exsplination about
Combat fatigue, it was a little long winded though. A few other breeches
of character where apparent as well, but it fit into the story all right
so I'm willing to let them pass. [[Tofu beating up Genma was the biggest
one. He's also a bit pushy and rude at the Tendo home and would have been
asked to leave by the Saotomes since he insulted them so badly. Tendo
would have been able to keep him around since it is his home and his
future is riding on the engagement basically.]]
I'm kind of curious about this 'Cold Dragon' thing you've got. Possibly
a cold powered berzerker Ranma? It has the ear marks of a tragedy, or a
'Ranma beats up everyone and solves his problems' fic. The former would
be the preferable option on this IMHO.
I never got around to reading Spreading wings myself, [More into comedic
fanfics myself.] but you've got my intrest and I'll check it out.
Ja
Carrotglace.