Phil wrote:
Hmm. I'm finally getting down to doing some C&C. Better late than never, I
guess.
Darn straight. I have never recieved C+C that was 'too late'. And I'd
always prefer someone take a few extra days and take their time to comment
on something rather than forcing themselves to hurry through it. So don't
ever worry about being late.
And as to turning in C+C well after a fic was posted, heh. I've had stuff
sitting in my box for a month before getting around to C+Cing it. Haven't
gotten a complaint about lateness yet. ^_^
As Ryouko finished her declaration, gigantic tentacles hundreds of feet
long and dozens of feet across shot out of the water and wrapped
themselves
around Ryo-Ohki, halting her in mid-flight.
"I hate you," Aeka said calmly to Ryouko right before Ryo-Ohki was
dragged
into the icy depths of the ocean below.
I know other people have said this already, but this is still the best
opening
sequence to a fic that I've read for a long time. It's clever, IC, and
darn
hilarious. Kudos.
Many thanks. That scene seems to have gone over well with most of the
readers.
Any and all C+C craved for. You can contact me at:
sommer@3rdm.net
Ask and you shall receive? :)
Or so one hopes. ^_^
"A Sasquish." It was an odd being to be among the group of pirates. In
general they were a race that tended to be well respected throughout the
galaxy. They were most famous for being very talented negotiators, with
sharp minds and quick wits. That they also tended to stand between seven
and ten feet tall, bore very sharp teeth and sharper claws, and weighed
in
around five hundred to seven hundred pounds of solid muscle that could
break most other sentient races in half without halfway-trying did not
hurt
in most of their negotiations either. Onita had never met one himself,
but
Sasquish were usually spoken of in terms of great respect.
Heh. Look - more cannon fodder.
Nah. Ensign C. Fodder died on the Rack N'Ruin already.
A 'Sa-squish' indeed: The question is whether
this newcomer will do any serious squishing or will end up being squished
a la
Fera.
Well, as you can tell, courtesy of Tenchi, an errent laser, and a small
mountain, 'squished' was what was in his future. Now poor Stargrave and
Malgaunt only have six members left in the party. And that's counting
themselves.
Among them was that Fera was dead. Somehow Funuyaki instinctively knew
that, although she could not say how she knew or why. She was beginning
to
wonder if any of them were going to get off the rock they were stranded
on
alive. As the casualties on Funuyaki's 'side' continued to soar, she had
to
admit it was not an unrealistic expectation.
"You're all gonna die! Bwahahahahaha!!!" :)
But how do you know one of them hasn't read the 'Dr. Evil's Methods on How
to Escape Certain Death at the Hands of Your Arch-Nemesis'? :)
Much to the others' surprise, Stargrave grinned, the first time he had
done
so since they had crashed. "You do at that, old one. You do at that. Now
let's get going" He took a moment to pull the locator out and examine
its
viewscreen once again. The blip still remained at the exact same
coordinates it had before. If it stayed that way for one more day, it
would
be his once again. And then he would prove Autolycus wrong as the galaxy
trembled at his feet.
Key in the maniacal laughter as the rest of the crew stared in dismay.
Stargrave isn't really a maniacal laughter kind of guy. More like evil
snickering, the kind that makes you want to kick the teeth of the snickerer
in.
the tall, pale, greyish-haired teacher with the small glasses on his
nose,
who seemed to have a bad tendency to come after Tenchi with an energy
sword
whenever he got an answer wrong. There was the spiky red-haired school
nurse that kept trying to give him enemas, and then there was his
younger
sister, who would pop in periodically and say 'poor Tenchi', and offer
him
support. Somehow, they all seemed faintly familiar to him, although he
couldn't place a name with any of the faces.
Magical Girl Pretty Sammy? :)
Wah! Not that! I hadn't realized it at the time, but the Aeka, Ryouko, and
Sasami characters are sort of like that. And I dislike MGPS too. Curious. I
assure you the resembalance was purely coincidental.
again.
"Of course, I'd be happy to help you with the cooking, Sasami."
Oh, the delicious irony. So nicely chewable. :)
When the ego tries to grow unchecked, it get the smack put down on it
before you know it. Even Tenchi's, what little he has.
Tenchi stopped pulling the anti-grav sled and looked in the direction
she
pointed, shielding his eyes from the glare of the twin setting suns and
stared at the distant horizon. A soft smile broke across his features as
he
bathed himself in the panoramic view before him.
Of course, he failed to realize that it made him look just like Luke
Skywalker
in Star Wars. Mihoshi, who had seen the film a dozen times since arriving
on
Earth, hid a quiet sigh of delight.
Heh. Cute.
That was just great. Tenchi took note of their surroundings. The pass
they
were in was narrow and with sheer sides that made climbing impossible.
Judging by how fast the Sasquish had initially ran towards them, there
was
no chance they could outrun him either. Unless a space ship suddenly
swooped down and chased off the large alien, they were not going to get
out
of this without a fight.
All of a sudden, a giant space ship appeared and.... nah, too boring. :)
And a part of the 'outtakes section' I have for the end.
Tenchi gulped audibly. "Stay back, or I won't be responsible for what
happens to you." Tenchi saw that words had no effect on the much larger
alien, and was about to go into an attack position with the master key
when
the blade flickered, then went out altogether.
"Ahhh! This never happened to Luke Skywalker!" Tenchi exclaimed.
Of course, Luke didn't have the babes all falling over him like Tenchi
either, so it all balances out.
upward, for he thought he recognized the sound and understood what the
first stone had heralded. Sure enough, just as he looked skyward, he saw
a
large portion of the pass wall, the part that the fourth laser shot had
hit, give way and come falling down the towards him like a gray wave of
water.
Mihoshi's luck holds true even when she's unconscious.
Nah. Tenchi's balance of luck kicking in here. Bad luck the sword didn't
work. Good luck that the laser did.
Pupei lunged forward, hoping to make it under the overhang Tenchi had
fallen under, all the while knowing he wasn't going to make it. A prayer
passed his lips as he felt the first, and largest of the rocks, hit him
squarely in the back. A Sasquish's hide could withstand a great deal of
abuse, but tons of stone falling from that height was far too much, even
for someone as durable as Pupei.
Oh well. This answers the question of whether Pupei would squish or be
squished. :)
Yep.
"Ohhhh, that's really pretty. You know. I think that second orb inside
the
first one is made out of polynison. That's strange because it's really,
really expensive and to use that much of it would cost a small
fortun...Tenchi, why are you hitting your head into the ground and
saying
'Why do I even bother' over and over again?"
Yeah. Why does he even bother?
As I said before: He's Tenchi. It's what he does. It's what he is.
Oh wait, that was Washu that ended up bashing
her head the last time... :)
True too.
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Wow! Just under two weeks to get this one done.
And two weeks for me to get some C&C out. Oh well.
It happens to everyone.
Anymore now that's turning
out to be a good speed for me >_<. Hopefully the next chapter won't
take
as long,
In light of the fact I have literally not written another word of this
story since I posted the chapter, it's going to be a wee bit longer than
even that.
although I might work a little on a smaller piece if the mood
strikes me, so no guarentees (although I will promise to finish this).
Lots
of ideas running around in the cranium, nowhere near enough time to put
them all down on pape...well on disk space.
Thanks for reading.
Thanks for writing, DB. Wonderful stuff yet again.
And thank you for the C+C.
D.B. Sommer