I liked the whole concept of it, and the dialogue is
well controlled. I'm not so sure about the ending,
though. It kind of degenerated into the average sappy
Akane and Ranms shortfic ending, but there was enough
prior warning for it not to be a total letdown. I
don't think there was any other way it could have
ended, anyway.

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