Again, thanks for writing!
You wrote:
"Tenchi, Sasami truly desires to marry you. And I promise
you that she... and I... will never regret it."
Of course, Tenchi might. ^_^
Heh.
Tenchi smiled back at Tsunami in relief. "Okay." Tenchi
kneeled next to Sasami and carefully put an engagement
earring in Sasami's left ear.
I think you can go with 'her' for the second 'Sasami'
Probably. I may change it for the final version, but I
thought it just possible that a 'her' could be misread as
Tsunami's left ear.
By main force,
main force? There's got to be a better way to word that.
Probably. "By sheer effort of will"?
As Tenchi walked and Mihoshi skipped into the sunset, holding
hands, Kiyone sat in the dirt, looking after them. "I just
hope Tenchi-san knows what he's getting himself into."
When does he ever truly know what he's getting into?
Cute work. Now that the proposing is out of the way, time to
get to the
main part of the story. (assuming there is one) ^_^
Well, I don't expect there to be a real, long 'central'
Sketch. I expect this series to continue to be short episodes,
peeks at Tenchi & co., if you will. There will be an overall
plot, but probably no real resolution (how could there be,
other than with Tenchi's death?). Relationships will progress,
and we'll see glimpses of later stages of Tenchi's life, but
Tenchi will continue to be victimized, humourously.