Subject: [FFML] [Fanfic][Ranma][CC] A War Fought in Silence 2A
From: Starrngr@aol.com
Date: 3/22/1999, 3:41 AM
To: PhilMasters@webtv.net, FFML@fanfic.com

In a message dated 3/20/99 12:06:19 AM Pacific Standard Time,
PhilMasters@webtv.net writes:

PM Productions Presents
 A Phillip Masters Fanfic
 A War Fought in Silence
 Chapter Two (A): Consequenses
 

Whew... Glad I made the time to try and C&C two stories in one day.  Again, a
very gripping story, well crafted.  A chilling portrayal of possibly the most
overlooked charecter in Ficdom.  (Yes, I feel confidant in saying that.  Look
at all the Ranma fics out there.  It seems like there are more Ranma fics out
there than any other Genre, though Sailor Moon does come in a close second.
Yet, in 99% of those stories, Kasumi is little more than a background prop who
stands around and says "Oh my!"  Its always a joy to see more of her.)

Both this and the first chapter give us a very real look at the person behind
the smiling mask, a person who puts aside her own needs to care for those
around her.  It is both compelling and reasonable.  It gives Kasumi a very
believable third dimension without taking her in a direction that is
completely different from the cannon material.

As to technical matters, I saw few if any spelling errors, mostly very minor.
What you do need to do is give this the read aloud test, because there were
some passages where I felt a different pronoun would be better.  They dont
come readily to mind at the moment, and right now I'm running on being up near
36 hours straight, so I dotn have the energy to do a line by line on it
looking for them.  Also, I'm not sure they are really BAD english, its
probobly more of the type "I would phrase it differently".