as a way of life so many years ago.  *I hope that Ranma can avoid the
same mistakes that I did not.  The last thing that my son needs in his

This sounds bad enough for me to notice even when *not* in editing mode. :-)
The point is that he isn't avoiding the same mistakes - because Genma
*didn't* avoid them. Scratch "same"; that flows much better.

Hmmm... Good point.  Thanks.

Woohoo. Not much else to say in term of specific comments. What I would
say about this series is that beyond the excellent *writing*, it is not
as much good, or exciting, or engaging, as it is *interesting*. The

Wow, it is comments like this that make the effort worthwhile.  :-)

plot (which so far feels very vague and not really moving much) seems
more like a medium for exploring the setting(s) than anything else
else. Usually, I do not much like this type of story, but here it works
well (and the elaborate writing style suits it very well, whereas it
might feel to big and in the way in another type of fic), and I can't
wait to find out more!

One early reader actually described my writing style as "lurid" of all things.  Since one
meaning of that word is sensational, I take that as a compliment.  After chapter seven is
done, I will be picking up the pace a little more.  Right now, each chapter is a single
day, and I keep feeling like my plot is moving along at a glacial pace.

More is coming.  I am writing chapter seven now -- "Sins of the Fathers, Part One."

And I must say your output rate is most impressive. :-)

Thanks.  Since the chapters have been getting a bit longer than I thought they would, the
time between releases has slowed down.  I am trying to write as fast as I can.  :-)

Jurai Knight

"No matter how badly outnumbered you are, or little time you have to prepare, you must
always save the world, get the girl, and say something witty before the end of the day."
-- From the Anime Hero List