Rod M wrote:

On Wed, 17 Mar 1999, Bobby wrote:

Good chapter. Great humour as usual, the end scene was a classic.
However it seemed like you were switching between prose and script
format.
Was this intentional?

Script?  Er... where exactly is it script? O.o

Well, I'm not quite sure but I think it sorta crept in around here. 
When you wrote the part about Ukyou and Akane acting as Ranma and 
Ryouga you putin brackets who they were. Afterwards you seemed to be 
doing that to Ranma and Ryouga as well even though they weren't 
pretending to be anyone.

Ranma(in-denial) frowned.  "Hey, am I that bad?  I am _not_
that bad." 

Here, for example.

"Yes you are," mumbled Ryouga(irritated).  "But I'm not like
that.  No way."

And again.

<snip>

"I do NOT have an oversized ego," muttered
Ranma(not-amused).

"Oh yes you do," replied Ryouga(amused).

"Do not," said Ranma(insulted).

"Do too," said Hiroshi, Daisuke, Sayuri, Yuka, Nabiki,
and Ryouga (amused greatly).

And four times here.

<snip>

"Well, it _is_ heavy," Ryouga(not-getting-the-joke) said to
nobody in particular.

Here too.

"Hey, that ain't funny," said Ranma(ailurophobe).

And here as well

If this was intentional then I think I must of interpreted something
wrong, sorry.

BTW Ryo is one of the best characters to appear in a Ranma fanfic. The
only character I like more would be the IMBS version of Ranma. I hope he
will still appear in this 'fic despite your notes for the third act.

At best, he'll have a small piece of the action in act 3.  I'm
saving him up for the finale, act 4.

Aww, shucks.

BTW could you send me act3 pt1? (Privately of course) I accidently
deleted it.

Bobby 
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