Konichiwa! ^_^

	I just read over your chapter, and I admit, it's pretty good writing from
what I've seen.  But I noticed something about it.

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      "Yes?" Nabiki interrupted, a higher pitch struggling to contain and
muffle her hope from her voice. She gripped the phone tighter, her fingers
tensing in anticipation. "Yes?"
      "We did have a visitor today." She sighed inwardly with
disappointment as Kasumi continued, "Ryoga came and had a little training
session with Ranma in the Dojo."

	This little tidbit shows a bit of "loosing the focus".  Whenever you switch
focus of a character, you should go to another paragraph, right?  The second
paragraph here was focusing on Kasumi due to the fact she was speaking,
however, the focus was suddenly lost over to Nabiki, which made it pretty darn
confusing for a moment there.

I hope that helped!