Bobby- Well, I'm going to be replying on "Stephiroth's" behalf.

Razorclaw X wrote:

Here is a short, little fanfic written by my short, little sister.
Go easy on her though, she's only 11.

  Very well, I won't go into my textual rants.

                         Goodbye

My name is Stephiroth. This is my first fanfic and I really don't
know what else to put here so I'll just start.

  A play on Seph? Never mind.

Yup. 

Shampoo had left in tears, but not before trying to kill Akane.
Cologne left with Shampoo, but not before trying to kill Ranma.
Mousse left following Shampoo.

  ...but not before trying to kill Ranma for making Shampoo cry.
  Never mind.

Kuno had left in search of his pig-tailed goddess. He did not come

back.

  This I have a problem with. Why would Kuno leave knowing that the girl
of his dreams is in Nerima (of course, this is assuming that Ranma's
been going around in his girl form every once in a while-- knowing
Ranma, that happens quite often)?

The reader is supposed to assume that Ranma cooked up some plan
possibily
with Nabiki (as if he could come up with a workable plan on his own) to 
convince Kuno that the pig-tailed goddess left Nerima.   

Ryouga had left to wander the world. He did not come back.
Ukyou had disappeared. As soon as she heard that Ranma and Akane
had gotten married, she closed down her restaurant, gathered her
possessions and left without a word.

Some people were worried about her. They hadn't expected her to leave.
They had expected her to still be Ranma's best friend.

  It might help to note which people were worried about her. Then again,
that might include all of her regular customers. Some people might
actually be happy she left, too.

See below.

He sighed again, this time in a different manner.

Why did she leave?
I thought you were my best friend, Ukyou.

  Heh, it's just like Ranma to think that. Especially since it's one of
the biggest paradoxes Ranma ever created-- he treats Ukyo like dirt more
often than as a friend.

Ranma thought of home. Akane did not accompany him to the springs. He
did not want her to come. Ranma told her it would be too dangerous if
she came with him. He did not want Akane to be cursed.

  It's just like him to think that. Especially since every other person
that went there came back with a curse, too.

"Hello, er, where is the spring of drowned man?" Ranma asked.

The guide looked at him strangely.

"No spring of drowned man here, sir, sorry."

  Gaaah?

This is another case of the amazing phenonemon known as author licence.
 

"Ukyou?!"

  Here's what I'm wondering: what is she doing there?

Just one of those odd coincendences that occur in the Ranam universe. 

Ukyou turned around.
Unfortunately, Ranma was not greeted very warmly by her.
Ukyou's eyes narrowed in anger as she saw him.
Ranma was shocked to see Ukyou. She did not look the same as she did
three years ago. Her eyes were red, very red.

  Satanic Ukyo (TM)!! Run for your lives!! :)

Heh heh heh.

<snip>

  This was good for a first, but there's one thing that puzzled me: why
the trip to the springs if it served no actual purpose? And why was Ukyo
there in the first place? (Fine, so I lied; it was two things.)

Actually, Steph wanted the meeting to be accidental but it didn't seem 
plausable for Ukyo to be in Nerima after she had left so abrutly. The 
cursed springs seemed like a good second choice.

I realize there are alot of holes in the stories but the main reason for 
them is that the focus of the story is supposed to be on Ukyo and
Ranma's
relationship so alot of extra details are ommited (eg. the reason for 
there being no pool of drowned man).

-Bobby
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