Subject: Re: [FFML][Fanfic][R1/2] Shampoo 1/2 Epilogue 1: The Wheel Turns
From: "Freemage ." <freemage@hotmail.com>
Date: 2/5/1999, 11:57 AM
To: sommer@3rdm.net
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Right.  Late, but not never.

The breakdown:

Opening:
  Suitibly poetic, making clear that this is going to be a long hard 
road for her.

Akane & Silk:
  I liked this relationship, a lot.  The fact that their potential 
problems were not simply ignored was well done, and the resolution was 
both believable and satisfying.  And I love the idea of a step-mom who 
launches surprise attacks every morning.  So what's the newborn's name 
gonna be?

Idle thought:
  Hmmm... Akane Tendou, funeral director.  Has a certain ring to it, 
dontcha think?  ((Probably way too subtle a plug for Illuminations))

Kasumi & Birdy:
  You're doing this to me intentionally, aren't you?

The Rumour Mill:
  Laughed much.  Of course, the idea that the fathers were still 
planning for Ranma's return had me begging for Nodoka and Silk to open 
up a can of whup-ass.

Nabiki's reaction to Tarou's death:
  This was probably the most mystifying point, for me.  I do hope it 
will be explained in future portions.  I would have put her feelings for 
him slightly below those she had for Birdy....

Weather patterns:
  Chuckle.

XOver and OVA elements:
  A little thick at points, but I like the humanization of Ki-Rin.

Mirror:
  A brilliant conclusion.  Kudos to the ghost-sweeper.

Overall theme/reaction:
  Very powerful.  I was reminded of a scab, constantly being pulled back 
to reveal that a little more of the flesh underneath was healed, but 
with just enough of an injury that the scab reforms, until one day, 
almost magically, there is nothing but bright pink skin underneath.

Bravissimo.

--Freemage





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