Subject: [FFML][Fic][SM][Dark]And Death Shall Have No Dominion
From: "Craig Putnam" <chputnam@vitrex.net>
Date: 1/10/1999, 12:56 AM
To: "FFML" <ffml@fanfic.com>

This is my hundred and twenty-seventh fic.  Actually, it's my first, but you
didn't know that, did you? ^_-

C&C welcome, more info after the text.


--- Slash savagely here ---


And Death Shall Have No Dominion

Prologue: Clouds without water, carried of winds

I was there.

I was there, as a seeker of curious things.
I saw the Eternal Queen's Pantheon:
to Mercury, a quiet shrine
on the shore of the inland sea;
to Venus, a house of kindness
where the weak and weary went;
to Mars, a temple to fire
above a ruined southern town;
to Jupiter, a hall of battle
for training Lesser Senshi;
to Moon and Earth, the Royal Palace,
where her third-great granddaughter graces the throne.

I was there when she,
Saturn,
appeared in the shrine and
snuffed out the candles and
destroyed her likeness in stone.
She chased the patrons and priests
out the doors, to the street.
"Worship me not!" she cried
to a stunned and frightened crowd.
"Bow down before your betters,
bow down before the Queen,
bow down before the Pantheon,
but DO NOT WORSHIP ME!"

I was just a seeker of curious things,
not a priest or humble pilgrim.
But at her command I felt a pang
of desperation and regret.  I
desperately
wanted to fall
at the feet of a Goddess
with the fire of Mars
and the beauty of Venus.

I wandered for some time; years, I think.
Too far away from where the Queen reigned
I met a young woman, a healer of sorts,
who reminded me so much of the Dark Goddess --
the name she was given by then --
that I vowed to stay by her side.

And that is how the story begins
I know, because I was there.


--- End savage slashing ---


...I haven't put that much effort into something since before I dropped out
of high school!

Just looking for a little C&C here.  Is this worth continuing.  It's a
helluva lotta work to get it sounding close to good, so the full story I
have in mind might be a little much for a newbie like mou.

Does this sort of prose grate on anyone's sensibilities?  I was hoping for a
Homerian effect, but I might have ended up with something rather Lisa
Simpsonian.

Anyways, thanks to Mark Page, for inadvertently gave me the style idea, and
to TH, who wanted a Hotaru-chan fic.  Ehh, I'll write the rest of this,
promise! <fingers crossed, makse it diffficult to tpye>

-- Craig Putnam
Sailor Singularity