Subject: Re: [FFML][Fanfic][R1/2] Shampoo 1/2 Chapter 37: The Dreams of a Dragon King |
From: David Johnston |
Date: 11/21/1998, 8:16 PM |
To: sommer@3rdm.net |
CC: ffml@fanfic.com |
Frankly I think Maelstrom should not talk so much. Combined with the all-CAPS diction, it's a real strain on the eyes, and the story could easily be slimmed down without losing any of the substantive points.