Subject: Re: [FFML][Fanfic][R1/2] Shampoo 1/2 Chapter 37: The Dreams of a Dragon King
From: David Johnston
Date: 11/21/1998, 8:16 PM
To: sommer@3rdm.net
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

Frankly I think Maelstrom should not talk so much.  Combined with the
all-CAPS diction, it's a real strain on the eyes, and the story could
easily be slimmed down without losing any of the substantive points.