(I'll make this quick - I think there's a couple of people out there
ready to lynch me for spending time on these things- I'm a month overdue 
on a fic I promised to someone.)

At 07:40 AM 1/07/98 PDT, Cass Chia wrote:

This is our first fanfic, so please be gentle. Comments, criticisms and 
MSTs are welcome. You can reach us at chiaty@singnet.com.sg
You can view this at http://www.singnet.com.sg/~chiaty
This story is set one year after the start of the series and it 
continues from there.
< > represents a character's thoughts.

Okay, first fanfic, I'll be gentle. It seems like a nice little story(I
enjoyed Ryouga's self-delusion in making all that poetry, when we all
know what was going to happen when he faced Akane), but you've got a
REAL problem with spelling/grammar(you even misspelt a word in the disclaimer,
never a good sign, and there are several instances of you swapping between
present and past tense: stick to one). This is going to lose you readers;
I'm one who doesn't mind it, but a _lot_ of readers do. 

I'd suggest getting a prereader or two with decent English editting
abilities - just ask the list if nothing else(but don't spam! *_*),
you should be able to get a couple. (Of course, that's relatively
hypocritical advice - in all the fanfics I've ever written, only one
had prereaders. Still, I think they could help you.)



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Mark Doherty  -  mdoherty@uq.net.au
My spam/fanfics are at - 
http://www.tass.org/~mdoherty/index.html

Everything I learned, I learned from fanfics No. 7:
Every anime female is bisexual. Unless, of course, they're a lesbian.