On Sun, 4 Jan 1998, Kyo Kusanagi wrote:

With the lemon scene and Ranma leaving Shampoo after it, hmm I 
considered the question of honor but for the sake of the story flowing, 
i couldn't think of any other way to do it. Coz what happens later is 
that though Ranma did leave Shampoo, he's been getting nagging thoughts 
from his conscience about that fact that Shampoo was now his etc etc. 

IMHO that was very cruel of Ranma. Basically he used poor Shampoo-chan for
sex didn't he, then dumped her for Akane. :(

I think it was a bit abrupt in Chapter 2 when Ranma made up with Akane. It
looks to me like the two would not confess their love so quickly, barring
unusual circumstances (e.g. magic; Akane is under the influence of the
reversal jewel, or death; Ranma thinks Akane is dead in the Saffron
episodes). One moment Ranma and Akane are broken up, the next moment
they're admitting their love for each other. *shrug*

For the sake of his health though (if Akane finds out), he's been trying 
to hide it. Then Shampoo shows up later during a time when Ranma and 
Akane have one of their intimate moments and lowers the boom.

Oh oh, that could make for a very interesting scene. :) I wonder what
would happen if Ranma denied doing it.

>From there, a lot can happen, the obvious is that Akane gets REALLY mad 
and breaks the engagement(well maybe not to that extent -suggestions plz 
;). Regarding a question of honor, his mother would prolly offer him 2 
choices, 1) redeem his honor and marry Shampoo, therefore breaking the 
engagement with Akane and most prolly getting him and the rest of his 
family kicked out of the Tendo household or 2) commit seppuku as a 
disgraced warrior.

I REALLY hope you don't decide to pick choice #2...I wouldn't want this to
become a darkfic. :)

All this (depending on how i decide to write it and feedback) will take 
place in Chapter 4. Chapter 3 basically sees Ranma getting reunited with 
his mother, another intimate scene with Akane and Ran-ko gets attacked 
by one of the shadow creatures. As well as Ranma's conscience beginning 
to nag at him.Chapter 4: Days of Thunder, Nights of Pain basically 
begins with the invitations to the tournament being sent out and Ranma 
making the decision on whether to marry Shampoo and leave Akane or die.

How about a section of the next chapter devoted to Shampoo's thoughts and
feelings about what has happened with Ranma up to this point? Like one of
those scenes where nothing actually happens but the thoughts of the
character are described in detail.

Feedback on the above will be appreciated :) Btw, i'll say now that in 
the tournament later (or rather after the FORMAL fights) one of the 
characters gets killed. I am debating on who, atm i am leaning toward 
Ran-ko as Ranma is forced to kill her in the 'Mangetsu no Jusenkyo' 
state.

Ack!! Not kawaii Ranko-chan!! :P How about Mousse? If Ranma decides to
marry Shampoo, Mousse has to be gotten out of this picture SOMEHOW. This
would be a good way of doing it. Heh.

You know, its too bad Ranko doesn't have Ranma's memories. If she did, you
could write her into a lesbian relationship with Ukyou just like in the
Nullifier spinoff fic. :)