Four days of work, huh?  IMHO well worth the time!  I really enjoyed 
this story (though some of the stuff about the onions did drag on a bit 
long).  I'd like to see you continue this.  The notion of a Nabiki 
seriously opposing Akane and Ranma's marriage is interesting.

My advice on your problem with Konatsu's POV is to try to turn a 
weakness into a strength.  Since Konatsu is narrating you don't have to 
deal with exactly how Nabiki accomplishes things, instead you can merely 
show the results.  Also, remember Konatsu is a super-ninja.  It's 
perfectly possible for him to lurk about observing things that he 
ordinarily wouldn't see.

Please don't just end it here.  I honestly want to see what happens 
next!

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Matthew Campbell

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