"This morning a woman stopped by, said she wanted to

talk to you. She left a card, some motor club. I've seem to have
misplaced it though."<<

It still feels too contrived for the Goddesses to lead Asuka to them. Better to have her follow a clue to Nekomi instead.

Let's see how far she wants to take it* "3,000 yen."

I'm no expert at this, how much do you guys think Nabs should have charged for this info?

Suddenly Asuka felt her body loose energy as if it was being drained.

Much better. Very good.

"WHAT DO YOU THINK YOUR DOING MISS SORYU!? HAND ME THAT KNIFE THIS >INSTANT!!!"

Hinako wouldn't ask, she'd just take it out of Asuka's hand, who would be too weak to resist by this time.

All in all better than the 1st version.