Subject: Re: [FFML] [fanfic][R1/2] Challenge of the Heart
From: KLEPPE@execpc.com (Gary Kleppe)
Date: 9/27/1997, 8:10 PM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

On Sat, 27 Sep 1997 19:34:58 +0200, Ronny Hedin <thark@hem2.passagen.se>
wrote:

 Despite the late hour, the store was open. A white-haired old man
smiled at him as he entered. Looking at the shelves, though, he was
dissappointed. _Bah, it's all ecchi. I'm not interested in that stuff._
He was about to walk out, but the manager stopped him.

 "Not so fast, mr. Saotome," he said, grabbing Ranma's arm.

 "Hey! How'd you know my name?" Ranma was confused.

 "Only the pure of heart can find this store."

Welcome to Plot Device Mart! We're located on Deus ex Machina Street for
your shopping convenience.

Sorry, Ronny, but I have to be honest with you... this part just made me
cringe. And it was going really great before this scene -- romantic
drama in the best classic Takahashi tradition. I'd rather see you
continue the way you were going and have Ranma and Akane semi-resolve
their own relationship than have some mystical influence come in to show
them the way.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics