It's a great story. Just read through the entire thing. It took a 
while... (Brain coredump error. {R}etry {A}bort {W}hat the hell, never needed 
it before.) 

A great deal of amusing bits, Mihoshi, especially, was a lot of fun. That
probably made for a small problem with handling the last 3 or 4 chapters,
where humour mostly gets a boot out the door, but that's neither here nor
there.

All in all, a read I truly, really recommend to everyone, if you've got a 
spare eight or so hours(ugh). Now, onto the bit were I say BUT...

Er... I won't go into comparative moral, ethical, and philosophical
codes. Let's just say I couldn't accept that particular level of the
story due to conflicting views and leave it at that.

Easily the big problem I had with it were the foreshadowing lines. Every
time I read one, I suppressed the urge to groan. Maybe it was just me,
but they just seem way too corny.

By foreshadowing, I mean ones like the last line in this(taken, by random, 
from chapter 3, I think):
      "Sure.  Get me a Dr. Pepper."  She did so and sat back down next to
 him.  They chatted and snuggled and watched Anime until about 3 am, when
 he finally went home.  Little did he realize he would have cause to
 regret this...

That's why I made this post public, since I hadn't seen anyone else
mention it, to see if I'm just being annoyed by something that no-one 
else is.

The other problem I saw was that it seemed to get confusing towards the 
end(ch17 on). Very confusing, a bit muddled, it was hard to keep certain 
scenes straight in the mind.

Blah... I just can't seem to do C&C these days without putting in a
BUT...

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