On Sat, 13 Sep 1997 00:04:56 +0800, "Nikholas F. Toledo Zu"
<niftol@i-manila.com.ph> wrote:

	Akane argued that Auntie Nodoka would probably be amenable to 
dissolving the agreement if she and this Ranma would not see eye to eye.  

So it's been decided already that it'll be Akane? Not Kasumi or Nabiki?

	The man introduced himself as Ranma Saotome.
	"Oh, Ranma," Auntie Nodoka had said, hugging the muscular young 
man.  "Whe- where is your father?"
	"Genma... father... is dead."

"YESS!!!" :-)

	Weeks passed without Akane's knowledge, until a phone call brought 
her past to her present.  She disappeared, and the people of the Tendo 
household feared she had gone searching for her fiancée.

Fiancé. Fiancée is a woman. (Though in this case... :-))

	Shinnosuke's blood ran with a fever sending him into seizures.  His 
grandfather had gotten up, knowing that his grandson was going to die.  
He took a mop, and donned his monster-killer outfit, amidst coughs.  She 
wanted to go with him, but the old man cried, "NO!"
	"Someone must stay to watch over him," he quickly covered his 
agitation.
	"I'll go get the moss of life, and you take care of him," Akane 
persisted.  

How the heck did she get here all of the sudden?

	She stopped.  He remembered her name.  He was also having a hard 
time to talk.  She shushed him.  "Keep quiet, and open wide."  She had a 
ladle in her hand, and waited for him to comply.  He tried, and soup 
trickled down the side of his face, and down his throat.  "Oh, dear."  
Akane quickly wiped the offending trail away.  She then saw the look that 
was in his eyes.
	He was delusional, at that point.  But it didn't matter.  He was in 
pain.

Her cooking's been known to do that... :)

You keep putting in more and more complications. I'd like to see you
slow down a little and give us some big picture -- some idea of what
this is leading up to and how it will all fit together. Something to
hook us into the story.


Gary Kleppe
kleppe@execpc.com, Home page http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe
My fanfics and the FFML map are on my comics/manga page,
       http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics