Subject: Re: [FFML] (fic)(BGC)(Lemon)Follow Me Into Darkness
From: Chris Davies
Date: 6/1/1997, 11:23 AM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com
CC: Brian Robinson <brobinso@mail.neocomm.net>


	Well, great ... first Overstreet and Mann write their paen to the
"Are the KS Lesbians?" thread, and then this comes out.  Someone beats me
to the punch of writing an explicit (non-parody) Sylia/Priss story. My
life is ashes.

	The worst part is, it's GOOD.  Except for a few formatting
problems, and one case of "you're" vs. "your", there are absolutely no
real stylistic problems.  And the little bit of spelling her name "Silia".

	My one suggestion would be to tell us what Sylia says just before
she loses consciousness.  I'm guessing that it's "Judas", but if so, it
really needs to be made clearer.

Chris Davies.