Good story - there's no doubt who Ranma's gonna end up with in 
the end (especially with a title like that), but, considering how you're 
slowly building it up, it actually seems somewhat plausible.  Shampoo's a 
little more reasonable than usual, but you pretty much established that 
at the beginning of part One.

;) oh, i just love surprise endings... ;) Just because I've been building
to it doesn't mean its going to happen... 

	A few comments, though:
	-Nodoka seems a little more wacky and intense than usual.  On the 
other hand, I like this take of her - I don't think I've seen it before - 
a Nodoka who's actually dissapointed with her son (after all, how can the 
reality possibly live up to the expectations of a ten-year old dream?)

That was the take on her I was going for. I'm glad someone liked it.

	-Genma seems to drop out of the story a bit quick.  They leave 
him behind, sure, but I can't see him staying there.  Even as a coward, 
he'd realize that the best place to be would be at his son's side.  When 
he _does_ eventually wander home, he's as good as dead, now.

yeah, I kinda shirked Genma early, as i didn't want to deal with him as
much in this one. He'll be back in the next one though.

	-The meeting at the Tendos ended awefully abruptly.  Not a big 
thing, and it works the way you have it - but everyone seems to take 
Ryoga's flustered and obviously made-on-the-spot comment at face value 
very quickly.  And as someone else mentioned, wouldn't it make more sense 
for Nodoka to blame Akane, not her son, for the pregnancy?

yeah, ok, I admit it, I screwed up here. I've been thinking of maybe
making a "revised chapter 2" to fix a couple of the plot holes I left, if
I do, this scene and a couple others will be the big benifiters.

	-Ukyou got off the hook too easy, it seems.  The fcat remains 
that most of the current problems are her fault, initiated by her little 
scheme (whatever her motivations were).  The fact that she gets to stay 
with the group would indicate that her perceverance (and her plot) 
actually worked in the end.  As the story stands right now, it still 
seems that she could end up with Ranma.

It sure does.. <evil grin> However, you are right, she has gotten off easy
at this point, but that may not last.

	-One question - why are they leaving Nerima?  Ranma already 
stated that he wanted to finish school, and Ukyou's got a successful 
restaurant she's leaving behind.  Between the three of 'em, they could 
make the Ucchan's boom, and live above it like Ukyou already does.  And 
it seems that Ranma would probably still like to try and patch things up 
with Akane.  Judging by the snippets at the end, the rest of the Tendos 
are coming around to believing him.  Of course, if the plot demands that 
they leave Nerima, then no biggy - although I can't see where'd they go...

One word:Memories. These three have been on a heck of an emotional
rollercoaster, and now, having (in their minds, at least) had all their
significant ties with Nerima severed, they're going to need space to get
to try to work through the new problems facing them, and to learn to live
post-Nerima.

	-Like the collection of snippets at the end.  If they are 
leaving, it's a great way to end the chapter (although if Kodachi's ninja 
saw all that went down, wouldn't she now about the curse, too?)  A 
snippet of Cologne or Genma would've been nice, though...

yeah, I should have put in something about Genma (something else to add to
the revised version). and the ninja probably only saw event after Ranma
returned to the Tendos. This part will be claified later in the next
chapter.

	Well... dunno if these comments help or not.  I'd offer grammatic 
C&C and stuff like that, but I'm not really all that good at it myself.  
Like the story - reads easy, and actually takes the time to develop the 
characters.  Looking forward to the next chapter!

they help alot, thank you. Not only to they provide me with alot of ideas
for the next chapter, but they let me know where I screwed up ^-^;;;;

anyway, thanks!
Ryan