Subject: Re: Clothes Make The... Chapter Four
From: KLEPPE@execpc.com (Gary Kleppe)
Date: 2/1/1997, 4:44 PM
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On Thu, 30 Jan 1997 15:59:33 -0600 (
), Nicholas Leifker <nwl9354@unix.tamu.edu> and Hitomi Ichinohei
<hitomi@terminal.autobahn.mb.ca> wrote:

Clothes Make The... 

Chapter Four: 



	Akane looked up at her aunt, afraid of what she might see or hear
in the older woman's voice for what she had done to her son.  Of all of
them, Nodoka had the most to lose since she hadn't seen her child in so
long.  There were still uncomfortable silences between mother and sont at
son

	She nodded sadly, in an effort to make her own act convincing.  A
tear formed in her eyes.  "Understand.  Bie Liao, Spatula Girl."  Shampoo,
Doesn't "Bie Liao" mean "Goodbye forever"? Seems a little strong.

	"Since you are an outsider to this entire country, I have already
contacted certain people.  If any harm comes to anyone here, by your hand
or any of your village, then a state of war will be declared.  The Chinese
government will not defend you and will help as well, as the Ambassador
>from China is not willing to go to war with Japan, and by extension the
United States, over you and your village."  Nabiki spoke with a chilling
calm, watching what little blood that remained in Cologne's face drain
away.  "By applying your laws, which is what you have always wanted, you
now stand on the brink of war in which the government of your own country
will help us with."
I have a *really* hard time believing that even Nabiki could stir up
an international incident over this. It would be more believable to me
if she were to play upon Cologne's honor. If Amazon laws *were* to
apply, then Cologne's interference with Ranma would clearly be in
violation of them, so her honor might compel her to promise Nabiki to
stay away.


	Ranma took off the rest of her clothes, and slipped into the sheer
gown.  "Fortunately, I do know the answer to that one.  You get in your
best dress, grab that hunk-of-a-doctor at the clinic, and take him out to
dinner.  Don't worry about supper tomorrow night; I'll cook, and try to
teach Akane while I'm at it."

I like the concept of this fic, and the writing is top-notch, but I'm
starting to feel a little disappointed by the direction this story
might be taking. Things are going way too well for Ranma, IMHO. I'd
like to see more emphasis on the problems that come from her
exploration of her feminine side, and how this compounds the other
troubles in her life. I really would rather not see the now-feminine
Ranma going around solving problems for all the other characters.
Ranma and company are most interesting to me when their lives are made
difficult, and I'd like to see that in this story.

The above, of course, is just one reader's opinion.

Gary Kleppe
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