Subject: Re: Facing Up |
From: WebDragon |
Date: 1/30/1997, 1:04 AM |
To: fanfic@fanfic.com |
Very nice. You got into Ryoga's head and exposed his feelings and thoughts in a very realistic manner - the part where Akane thought he just had a 'crush' on her was excellent. She doesn't know she is hurting him more with her words, and Ryoga knows she doesn't want to hurt him, but neither of them could help the situation. Tragic. Self-examining. Well told, barring a few minor spelling errors. You should have named the story "Moving On", IMO. ^_^