A couple of quick points on this series which is shaping up to be very 
fun IMHO. First off (and I don't know how many people have caught this..) 
but I love the way Kasumi is in your fic. This is how I've always thought 
of the character, and your description of her is very much an intresting 
and thoughtfull read. I do have one minor quibble though, and it deals 
with some elements I've caught in the later scenes of this fic. I have 
noticed that you seem to be using elements of Japanese culture in this 
fic (more so than just the Ranma 1/2 norm's used by other people), and 
while I do find some of them easier to catch like in the beginning of 
part 6, some might be harder for other readers to catch or to understand. 
You might want to consider adding a linear notes at the end of some 
chapters, similiar to the one's used in a Son's Duty, to help explain 
some of these to the reader's. 

BTW I would very much like to see where your SM leads...:)

Ja ne!!

Richard Beaubien
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Mizuno Ami-chan forever!!!

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