Ah, this story has me wondering how many twists and turns it's gonna take!
@_@;;; But I enjoy it. I'm a little tired to do some nitty gritty C&C, but
I saw nothing glaringly wrong, except it's too SHORT! Argh!^^ 
<Sound of whip cracking>
Write!!!!
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