Subject: [C &C][Repost] Piccolo's reviews (the first part)
From: yinyang@altered.com (yinyang)
Date: 8/7/1996, 4:48 PM
To: "'fanfic@fanfic.com'" <fanfic@fanfic.com>

Since the first part messed up, I'll resend the first part of my C & C not the whole thing... just the parts that was missing/messed up.

THE ATTRACTIVENESS FACTOR PT 1 & 2
by PhoneyNT
*Grammar: 7 Not very well structured in the beginning.
*Story: 7 Another story about Shampoo getting Ranma.  A bit of
twist is added though. 
*Characters: 6  You can make Ukyo a killer, you can make Shampoo nice, innocent, and intellegent, you can make Akane a slut, you can make Nabiki forget about money, but you never do that to Kasumi at the end of part two!!!!!.  Other than that, the characters were hanedled well.
*Humor: 7 I liked the new second part...
*Lemon: 4
*Overall: 7  The new second part made it a whole lot better.

PILAF AND THE BRAIN PART ONE
by Andrea Paulinski
*Grammar: 7 
*Story: 5 oh God, this sucked.  Boring...
*Characters: 6 Not a Dragon Ball fan. So I really didn't care
about the characters.
*Humor: 5 Only the parts with Pinky and the Brain was good.
*Overall: 4 This sucks... if you don't like Dragon Ball that much,
forget it. If you only like Pinky and the Brain, still avoid it.

AH! MEGAMI SAMA
by Chan Wei Lik
*Grammar: 8 
*Story: 7 Give me the next chapter... it's going great.
*Characters: 8 
*Humor: 5
*Drama: 1
*Overall: 7  A good read.

RANMA LEMONADE PUNCH #1: "RANMA FEVER"
by Paladin
*Grammar: 9 nice
*Story: 7  It was excellent before the lemonfest.  Could have
written it w/o the lemon parts
*Character: 5  I don't care if its a lemon.  But I don't think
Nabiki/Akane/Kasumi paring will do.
*Humor:  8  Good Takahashi type humor.  Till the lemon fest
*Lemon:  7  Lemon.... try making it original
*Overall: 7
 
EDGAR
by Nick Maragos
*Grammar:  9  Nick Maragos is a master, I think, at composition.  
*Story:  9  Nick's Final fantasy stories are always good,
including this one.
*Characters:  8 Very true to the original, and excellent development.
*Drama: 8
*Overall: 8.9 Nick's Final Fantasy stories are all excellent I think.
Try them, of course, you have to like final Fantasy 3.

FURINKAN SUMMER PT 1
By John Biles
*Grammar: 8  I did see some typos...
*Story: 9  come on, this is John Biles...
*Characters:  8  The characters were true to the original despite
all the changes he made... However, I still don't think Kodachi is that
good. Maybe because I don't know Kodachi that well.
*Humor: 8 I actually laughed a little
*Drama: 5
*Overall: 8.5

HEART OF THE FAMILY
By Richard Lawson
*Grammar:  6  This is the first draft I read so the grammar should
be bad. Also, even though this is the first draft, don't put Japanese if
you don't know how you uses it!  It make me cringe every time Kasumi called
her younger siblings oneechan.  Also, I really didn't decoded this
from MIME.
*Story:  9  Very Nice
*Characters:  9  Travel through the mind of Kasumi and it was very
very good. This fanfic will be the basis of some my future fanfics.
*Drama: 8
*Overall: 9  Just learn some Japanese and you'll be all right.  Of
course, I never did read the final version....