Subject: [NOTES] Author's comments on L in Love Lemon
From: Marisa Price
Date: 5/27/1996, 3:06 PM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

Hi all!


Thanks a LOT for your commentary.... like I  said, this was my
FIRST lemon dealie ever.... so I knew I would need some help.

1. Sorry Akane seems so innocent... I, uh, just kind of wrote
how I felt at 16. I mean, I knew the basic IDEA, but when I
first saw one at 17... I was, ahem, SHOCKED. Had no idea 
that they um went straight up like that ... or most of
the other stuff I wrote about... because, well, we
say a few picts (line drawings) in Biology... but you remember
how TINY they looked in the pictures? So when I actually
SAW one.... whelp... I was pretty shocked.
        Why hadn't I seen one until then? Well, I was a Mormon,
an only child, and a goody-goody, so I didn't have a chance 
to accidently see brothers, sister's boyfriends or any of
that. Akane has only had sisters... who are all pretty clueless
about boys... so I figured she hasn't seen any either...
        However, I will try to change this part to make her
seem less clueless... I was trying to be sweet... sorry :).


2. People saying that Akane had experimented (masturbated)....
Whelp, at
16, I didn't do that. At 22 I STILL don't do that (gee,
isn't that what my boyfriend is for?) so I just kinda never
thought of it from that angle... And, since Akane has a 
personality a lot like mine (tough on the outside, but really
caring, hurting, shy, etc. on the inside), I just kinda 
assume that she would think it would be "hentai"-ish to
do something like that.
        I really don't think I can change that part...
because, I mean I don't care if OTHER people do it, but
I just can't see someone like Akane doing it. Sorry.


3. About Akane "giving in" so easily-
        Whelp... I think she has always wanted to do it.
Well... if not "it"... she at least wanted to find out
more about Ranma's (check out the way she looks at him
when he is in the bathtub-- and what is this picture
she has seen too... can someone explain?) body. And,
she figures he loves her now.
        However, now that I look at it, this isn't
very clear (hey I wrote the thing at 2:00 am) and I
should explain it..... SOOO... after the thesis is
dont I will go try and do a rewrite.



I hope this explains my opinions, with which you are welcome
to disagree. I hope you enjoyed the story otherwise, and 
thanks A LOT for your comments.... 

To write a better lemon I guess I need to stop with so much
lemonade ^_-

-misa


P.S. I will also fix the spelling of "Yat-tttta!"

P.P.S. Yes, Ranma is just happy it went well, it isn't that
he planned it :)....


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