This is my first-ever attempt at a fanfic.  It's a Ranma 1/2 story.  It's
pretty serious for Ranma, but it's a story that I've always wanted to tell. 
Please let me know what you think; I'm very interested in some Commentary and
Criticism.

Thanks,

-Richard
sterman@sprynet.com

This is probably among one of the best fanfics I've read in a long time.  You 
sure this is your first one? ^_^  Very well done and it really develops 
Kasumi's character quite a bit.

One thing I must point out, though, is the use of "oneechan/san/sama" in it.  
"Oneechan" means "older sister" not just "sister",  so Kasumi shouldn't be 
referring to either Nabiki or Akane as such (nor should Nabiki refer to Akane 
as "oneechan").  The term that would be more appropriate would be "imooto", 
which means "younger sister".  Just thought you should know.


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