Subject: Re: [FanFic] Phantom Riders: Dreams (Alpha Version) |
From: Nightelf |
Date: 4/25/1996, 10:59 AM |
To: fanfic@fanfic.com |
A good alpha, though it was a little confusing due to the transition from first to third person. A recommendation: if you can, keep it all first person. It add such a feel...the detachment between story and reader is narrowed by it. With the first person, Cassi comes out much more, her thoughts and feelings much more pronounced than in the third-person format. Good job, and I'll see you at A-Kon. Nightelf nwl9354@tam2000.tamu.edu