Subject: Re: [FanFic] The Nameless Saga - Part 3 |
From: Ross McKenzie |
Date: 4/6/1996, 12:38 AM |
To: fanfic@tendo-dojo.ranma.net |
The story has become much more epic in scale; before, it just seemed like another Akane's cooking gone awry tales... I like the Shampoo/Kodachi interplay. You might want to rethink some of the dialogue. Cologne and Tofu usually sound dignified and professional; in this chapter, they used more colloquialisms than they normally do. ______ {B-{=__ rmckenzi@euclid.ucsd.edu : The White-Robed Mathematician