Subject: RE: [FanFic] [C and C] Mystery Fanfic Commentary Theatre 3000 comments on "Natsumi, the Magical Girl, chapter one."
From: beaubienrd@mala.bc.ca
Date: 3/5/1996, 2:24 PM
To: fanfic@tendo-dojo.ranma.net

Wow..Jadeite commenting on my fic..I feel honored that his first public 
apperance since his slight Accident is here commenting on my fic...Or 
should I be scared...

Tokyo, Japan: Nerima district.  Sometime in the past...

Jadeite:  Well, that's nice and vague...could be any time from yesterday 
to the Big bang.

Not really, Tokyo didn't alway's exist. It could be a time frame anywere from 
yesterday to about 200 year's ago. But this isn't a samurai drama ...:)
 
But instead, Kasumi was crying.  Concerned, Mrs. Tendo picked her
daughter up.  "What's the matter, Kasumi-chan?"

Ami:  Don't start sentences or paragraphs with but.  

I've been told that in my Grade 11 and 12 english class's. Basicly to avoid 
using the word's but (and And) to start sentence's. However I've seen these 
word's start many senetence's in fiction and other work's that I'm not 
too worried about this grammar mistake...Now my other grammar error's...

"Because I said I wanted to be a magical girl!  A warrior for
justice!  Like the girls in Mahou Senshi Stardust... and everyone
just laughed at me!"

Jadeite:  That's cause magical girls suck!  I hate them!  Kill them!  
Kill them all!  HAHAHAHAAHA!!!!!

I see the year's in the crystal have done wonder's for his Sanity..:)

Ami:  Poor little girl.  

Bailesu:  Makes you wonder why she never learned martial arts...

Ami:  Good question.

Later epsiode's, just wait and see. I can't give everthing away in part 1,
then you wouldn't have to read all the other part's.

The day's news offered a note of interest to her - the BFC, an

Ami:  What does BFC stand for?  You never tell us...

BFC Spokesyouma: Ha!!You think the BFC shall revel it's identiy to the 
fighter's of justice!!Haha!!you puny mortal's will never know untill it's 
to late!!BFC shall rule the world !!It has already begun with Win 95!!

Sorry..Ah BFC is just name. It's not there to drive the reader's crazy 
trying to figure out what it mean's. Nope, it's just a name..(trust me..:)

"Don't tell your father this, but I have envisioned you becoming a
talented cook as well as a martial artist."

Ami:  Why would she not want Akane to tell her father that?

Soun wanted Akane to be the son he never had, so doing stuff like 
cooking would not fit into his plan's for Akane (espically after the 
death of Mrs Tendo...). Or Soun just happened to know of Akane's, ahem, 
cooking potential...

Jadeite:  At least she didn't find it in a crackerjack box, like in 
Lovely Candy Warrior Miyuki.  

Ahh..so that's what that broach is for..Hmmm, I just need to get the 
thing to work now...:)


The junior business set rested on her desk.  Why was she feeling this
way?  She had already bought more expensive versions of everything in
the set, long ago...
Nabiki fell backward onto her bed and cried.  "Mom........."

Ami:  Nice Nabiki moment.

Glad it worked. This was one of the tougher part's to right because I wanted 
to show emotion without going against the character of Nabiki. Trust me, there 
will be lot's in store for Nabiki in this fic..

Now, if she had only come prepared for a youma...

Bailesu:  How would Nabiki prepare for a youma?

Easy, she would of come to the place with the bill's for the damage every 
Youma cause in a magical trap, which would total about a few billion yen plus 
intrest. If that wouldn't send a Youma running for the hill's I don't know 
what will...

"Kasumi-chan... Remember, you can be anything you want if you put
your mind to it.  You can do anything you want..."

Bailesu:  Except now she's reluctant...so why did she change her mind 
over the years about being a magical girl?

Ami:  I suppose we'll find out.

Yep, stay tuned for the next epsiode!!Will Kasumi save the world? Will 
BFC continue to produce SM cd's for the american market? Will Ryouga 
find his way home in time to watch the oscar's? All will be answered in 
the next epsiode of the Magical girl Natsumi..So stay tuned at the same 
Moon Channel, same Moon time (ops, wrong Magical girl show..:)
 
Bailesu:  An interesting story.  The only real question is what tone are 
you trying to set?  Post-modern poking fun at the genre?  The relatively 
serious tone of the sequence with the Tendo girls reacting to the gifts 
>from their mother?  Having had my head eaten recently over questions of 
tone, I pass the warning on to you.

Seriously now, I guess it's time for me to eat crow because I was one 
of the people out there that vocied some minor complaint's about the 
tone of your moon and earth story. You see I'm going to try and takle a 
mix of both in the fic. There will be some poking at the Magical girl 
genre (loving poking though), yet I will be looking seriously at the 
past of Kasumi and Nabiki, plus some other drama involving other character's.
Yes I know this could be a real pitfall for me, but this is the best way for 
me to attempt the fic. 

However, I must admit this idea started out in the Sailor Moon type 
of story as the orginal plan was started as a continuation of Sailor 
Ranma (when I finish this, there will be a loving tribute of this fic..)
where Kasumi would be Mako-chan and Nabiki would be Naru. I then came up 
with the parody Idea when I posted a round robin fic that featured Kasumi 
as Natsumi in a real parody of the genre, although there was some drama in 
it. Don't ask to see it though, it's in silcon heaven (I deleated it because 
I'm really low on file space here..). I guess I combined the two idea's 
togther when I was doing my SM fic, and this is the net result...A comedy 
that will have it's very serious moment's in it. I guess I now see what you 
were trying to do with the symphoney of planet's, and I relizie how my 
comment's were a little of topic. I know I could have problem's with this, 
but hopefully I pull it off...

Thank's for the comment's!!

Ja ne!!

Richard Beaubien
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Mizuno Ami-chan forever!!!