At 10:58 PM 2/8/96 -0800, you wrote:
[ Wing cheers ]
Yah!!!
Okay, now the music. ^_^
1) The new editions to the kuno-ranma battle seemed... disjointed. It's
around where the text states that Ranma is in the tree. Of course, I
might be reading it a bit slow, so... ^_^
They probably are a little rough. I forgot to take a "big picture read"
after I inserted the extra scenery. I'll read through it completely this
time, spackling knife in hand ^_^
2) The gash on Ranko's face seemed a bit un-resolved. Almost like it was
forgotten in the process of liquefing the kendoist. ^_^ hehe...
Neither of the Saotome Siblings have forgotten the wound. It will haunt her
for some time to come (and wait 'til). Come to think of it, it will haunt
the kendo student (name pending) too, if Ranko has her way, that is.
Other than those two points, and perhaps Kuno's innane babbling(which
means that it really sounds like him. ^_-)
Inane babble was the intent. Speech overstuffed with extensively *big*
words and arrogant actions was what I was trying to write. That's how I see
a previously-unchallenged-Kuno behaving.
, the story holds onto the
feeling of action and dances about with the thread of impending romance.
Like a painting that was always meant to be, but merely takes time to
discover it's location.
Ahh, well phrased. And the dance will continue for quite awhile. Akane has
a bit of healing to do.
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Later, | <witty .sig applied for> ^_^
Todd Hill |
Newberry College Computer Lab | Author: UY - The Prince and the Lecher
Newberry, South Carolina | Ranma 1/2 - Careful Destiny
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