Subject: Re: Final Revisions, Moonlight & Cherry Pie, Chaps. 1-7
From: Andy Skuse
Date: 12/30/1995, 12:24 PM
To: fanfic@andrew.cais.com

At 11:56 AM 30/12/95 -0500, you wrote:

Now who was that talking to Ran-chan? Hmmmm. Didn't *sound*
like Shampoo ;)

She said Ran-chan, so of course it was Ukyo.  Do I need to clear that up?

Perhaps by describing the setting briefly. . . I dunno. I'm still sorting the
cast out so it may be obvious to everyone else :)

But what does the setting have to do with it?  It's a dialogue scene.

Like I said it may be obvious to the veteran Ranma fans (at which point no
changes are required) but I just found that scene kind of 'jumps' in to
the story. The scene before had Ranma about to square off with Kuno and
then- bang- Ranma is with Ukyo. I understand that the Kuno fight is
implied and the result of that fight is not really important ;) but how Ranma
got to talking with Ukyo seems a little confusing (go ahead, say it- it's just me!)
I hate to do this to ya. I know you're itchin' to post this to r.a.a.s. Just ignore
me!!! ^_^


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